Trixie has the love of Starlight Glimmer but after an unexpected encounter one night, Starlight isn't the only one to love Trixie. Because of this, Starlight's desires change as well.
think you should have dragged out spike splitting up twilight to be a slow sad decay of his respect for his former mother and friend. for such long standing relationship that was far to fast. it like this, spike said to Starlight I dont know what happened something has changed she not same person I grow up with. she no longer what happened Starlight as he crying as Starlight hold him like a baby . like how children feel when their single mother get new boyfriend .should have been kind of like that just give pointers for future. I am try not be rude
Starlight replied, "She's calling herself The Weak and Subservient Twilight. It suddenly seems like she thinks the world of Trixie and is willing to lower herself to be subservient to Trixie."
Spike threw his hands up in the air, "Well that's it. I can't bring myself to be the assistant of a pony who would so easily do that." He got a smile on his face and asked, "Starlight, if Celestia would allow it, what would you think of me being your assistant?
I kinda understand, she lost all respect from you when she acts like that.
7252400 I kinda understand Spike is a lot more mature then we give him credit for, he knows that he shouldn't help somepony who is behaving so foolishly.
Starlight, without even thinking, self-levitated and started flying around the room. "It sounds great your Majesty, I can't wait to get started!"
Celestia's jaw dropped open when she saw this. She asked, "Starlight, are you flying?"
Starlight replied, "Yeah, I am."
Celestia asked, "Where did you learn to fly with just magic?"
Starlight replied, "It is just something that I discovered that I can do."
This really impressed Celestia. She had never seen a unicorn that could use her magic to fly. She asked, "Starlight, it is quite obvious that you have more magical talent than any other unicorn I have ever seen. Besides being my protege, what would you think about helping students who are struggling getting their magic to work?"
Alright, I can look past a lot of mistakes (though I will still point them out to myself) but this is all getting rather weird. Like this fic may not have been the most internally consistent, as well as being a narrative clusterduck, but it was funny. Now it is an absolute celestial mess, yet it is still funny.
P.S: While I know this is AU, none of the characters so far seemed to have been in character. Celestia was the biggest jarring character break for me though. I mean, her speech is just... so unrefined compared to how she speaks normally.
think you should have dragged out spike splitting up twilight to be a slow sad decay of his respect for his former mother and friend. for such long standing relationship that was far to fast. it like this, spike said to Starlight I dont know what happened something has changed she not same person I grow up with. she no longer what happened Starlight as he crying as Starlight hold him like a baby . like how children feel when their single mother get new boyfriend .should have been kind of like that just give pointers for future. I am try not be rude![:moustache:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/moustache.png)
I kinda understand, she lost all respect from you when she acts like that.
7252400
I kinda understand Spike is a lot more mature then we give him credit for, he knows that he shouldn't help somepony who is behaving so foolishly.
Starlight is talented that's for sure
Alright, I can look past a lot of mistakes (though I will still point them out to myself) but this is all getting rather weird. Like this fic may not have been the most internally consistent, as well as being a narrative clusterduck, but it was funny. Now it is an absolute celestial mess, yet it is still funny.
P.S: While I know this is AU, none of the characters so far seemed to have been in character. Celestia was the biggest jarring character break for me though. I mean, her speech is just... so unrefined compared to how she speaks normally.![:raritydespair:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritydespair.png)