What, no reviews for the new chapter? I'm disgusted.
Alright, first off, there's a few grammar issues to deal with, like commas being in the wrong place in some areas. Also is the [uh] in some areas, I think you meant to use the line break option which is [ hr ] instead.
Things advanced quickly, but considering the topic was being discussed fairly constantly, that might actually be expected. Pinkie getting things kicked off and acting natural despite being naked, that would probably make sense for why the others are willing to join in and give it a try.
Overall it was a fun read, and I'm seriously looking forward to seeing what comes next.
7089093 Thank you for pointing that little matter out to me. Totally spaced on actually double checking the line breaks thing. As far as my grammar errors, yeah. I'll admit I was in a bit of a hurry to actually post it after finally getting rolling on it after so many false starts and might not have double checked it as thoroughly as I should have. I fixed the hrs and may go over and fix those too at another point.
What, no reviews for the new chapter? I'm disgusted.
Alright, first off, there's a few grammar issues to deal with, like commas being in the wrong place in some areas. Also is the [uh] in some areas, I think you meant to use the line break option which is [ hr ] instead.
Things advanced quickly, but considering the topic was being discussed fairly constantly, that might actually be expected. Pinkie getting things kicked off and acting natural despite being naked, that would probably make sense for why the others are willing to join in and give it a try.
Overall it was a fun read, and I'm seriously looking forward to seeing what comes next.
7089093 Thank you for pointing that little matter out to me. Totally spaced on actually double checking the line breaks thing. As far as my grammar errors, yeah. I'll admit I was in a bit of a hurry to actually post it after finally getting rolling on it after so many false starts and might not have double checked it as thoroughly as I should have. I fixed the hrs and may go over and fix those too at another point.
Very goood chapter
Great Chapter~hug