7019527 I am going to assume you mean something like a beta or a proof reader. I am aware of the fact, and would only be too happy to have one, if I knew anyone who'd be comfortable with this kind of content enough to actually do so. If you mean something else by beta, then I have no clue what you mean and would appreciate clarification. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment though.
About halfway through the chapter you start referring to Applejack as "Apple Jack."
Good story so far! I wish some of the descriptions of their bodies were a bit more detailed—for example, when Fluttershy bends over at the start of the story—but other than that, it's pretty nice. Looking forward to more.
7028764 you are right. Thank you. It is fixed now.
As well as the matter of Apple Jack vs Applejack. I let a friend get a little into my head while I was writing it that kind of confused me about whether it should be one word or two before you pointed it out.
You are in dire need of a beta.
7019527 I am going to assume you mean something like a beta or a proof reader. I am aware of the fact, and would only be too happy to have one, if I knew anyone who'd be comfortable with this kind of content enough to actually do so. If you mean something else by beta, then I have no clue what you mean and would appreciate clarification. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment though.
About halfway through the chapter you start referring to Applejack as "Apple Jack."
Good story so far! I wish some of the descriptions of their bodies were a bit more detailed—for example, when Fluttershy bends over at the start of the story—but other than that, it's pretty nice. Looking forward to more.
7028764 you are right. Thank you. It is fixed now.
As well as the matter of Apple Jack vs Applejack. I let a friend get a little into my head while I was writing it that kind of confused me about whether it should be one word or two before you pointed it out.
It sounds like Pee Twi.