Twilight Sparkle discovers that Sunset Shimmer still has some leftover emotional baggage from her past, and peels through Sunset's emotional walls to find out a really big secret.
This story of "Everything I'v ever wanted" was very well written and I can not wait to see the next exciting chapter. I think you did wonderful delightful job on this work.
Nice start. I can sort of see where you're going with this but it will be interesting to see how you get there.
Small nitpick about chapter 1. Twilight has the Equestria side journal with her after she shows up at CHS. I'd think that would seal the portal behind her since it's needed to keep the mirror open. Might want to address it or change it a bit to keep the real critics from whining.
Well darn. I can't believe I didn't notice that. Not sure how I'd change it, really. Honestly when I first wrote the chapter, it started with Twilight already inside the cafe. I guess l can change it so that she goes back into her castle to write to Sunset. That'll give her time to get some warm clothes, too.
6909894 Reading this for the second time now, those letters... Even while begging her to return to you and claiming you were sorry, you still couldnt bring yourself to acknowledge her as your daughter.
This story of "Everything I'v ever wanted" was very well written and I can not wait to see the next exciting chapter. I think you did wonderful delightful job on this work.
I really want to know where this leads to. Impress me, my good author!
Have a like and a fav.
Doth I smell the scent of a Momlestia Fic?
If it tis so the much rejoicing is to be had!
(Spoiler warning for if I did in fact "Nail it")
You dont need an M rating unless you have explicit content like sex or porm. You cam use a T rating if all you have is Makeouts
Nice start. I can sort of see where you're going with this but it will be interesting to see how you get there.
Small nitpick about chapter 1. Twilight has the Equestria side journal with her after she shows up at CHS. I'd think that would seal the portal behind her since it's needed to keep the mirror open. Might want to address it or change it a bit to keep the real critics from whining.
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Well darn. I can't believe I didn't notice that. Not sure how I'd change it, really. Honestly when I first wrote the chapter, it started with Twilight already inside the cafe. I guess l can change it so that she goes back into her castle to write to Sunset. That'll give her time to get some warm clothes, too.
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What if Twilight was carrying one page out of the book, in case she needed it for emergencies?
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Reading this for the second time now, those letters...
Even while begging her to return to you and claiming you were sorry, you still couldnt bring yourself to acknowledge her as your daughter.
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Yeah that epic moment when you can't fix your dogshit parenting and family problems with a rainbow friendship beam.