Everfree Forest
The changeling didn't have to look far to find what he was looking for. He came upon a large tree that had fallen over a hole in the ground where the mental signal was emanating from. He looked under the trunk and found two luminescent blue eyes staring back at him. Quickly, he lifted up the trunk high enough to allow another changeling to crawl out from underneath.
"We have lost connection to the Hive-mind," said a monotone voice in his head, "Multiple injuries sustained. Swarm has been lost. Are you rescue?"
"No, I've been cut off as well," he said, helping the other changeling up onto it's feet, "We're on our own now."
"How can you use the voice speak? How can we be alone? Don't understand..." The other changeling passed out, leaving a trace of confusion in the first one's head.
Elsewhere in the forest
Twilight and Rainbow Dash followed Zecora through the Everfree forest to a small crater in the ground.
"Are you sure this is where you found the changeling?" Twilight asked Zecora.
"Yes, this is where I spotted it, It's crash must have left this pit."
"Well I don't see it around here any more. Let's spit up and comb the forest."
"Well, what if it changes into one of us?" Rainbow asked, "Who knows what it'll do?"
"Changing is what it can not do. It couldn't for me, so I think the same for you."
"Okay, everypony, let's go search and meet back here in 10 minuets." As everypony started to head off in different directions, Twilight stepped on something sharp. She looked down and saw what looked like a large black thorn laying on the ground. Without thinking, she picked up the object before continuing her search.
Chapters
Too
SHORT
Otherwise good, no noteable errors and it could get interesting.
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/discord.png "Ugh, this again?"
"Eeeyup. Another Changeling story that ends up the same. a changelin' 'r two end up gettin' lost without their fancy smancy hive."
"Why wont ponies ever try sumthin' different?"
722541
Yea, I've noticed that myself. They get longer as it goes on.
722545
Is that all you came here to do? Seriously?
723546 Welp, if you've been here as long as I have, you've notice the exact same plot you have in literally all changeling fics. Excluding four I've ever seen:
1) Takes place after season 2 finally.
2) Changelings "Lose" the hive.
3) Wacky/serious/sad adventure story here.
it is the most basic of formulas when it comes to a changeling fic. And I actually wanted to be special.
so you got that.
723567
Yes, but each one is also different in their own respects. I guess that's why there are so many. Plus I was bored, and needed an idea.
723603 In most standards I would agree...
but most of them find so many ways to run offa eachother.
So..
many...
WAYS.
It's a real shame they go like that too, as I happen to enjoy a good fic of the changeling nowadays, but I'd like a little more...originality?
Not to say your's is terrible, but the Idea's a beaten up as a dead horse. nothing on you.