Twilight awoke and took in her surroundings, she saw the bookcases and realised she had once more fallen asleep on her sofa, it wasn’t her first time and likely wasn’t her last. The thing that was different about this time was the blue mare resting on her shoulder, mane tickling her neck. Twilight smiled at the sleeping princess and stifled a sneeze that Luna’s mane had caused as it snaked up to Twilight’s face. Twilight pulled a hoof out from under the blanket, and wiped Luna’s light blue mane out of her eyes to look out the window. Judging by the light levels Twilight guessed that it almost mid-morning, her regular waking time after sleeping late. She gently eased herself out from under Luna’s head, laying her down gently so as not to wake her. Repositioning the blanket to cover Luna’s body in full, Twilight walked to the kitchen to prepare something to eat. Spike was nowhere to be found, after searching around the library she decided that he must have gone out for some reason. She was about to do a spell that would show her where he was when she remembered Luna’s words from the previous day, about how she shouldn’t pry into Spike’s personal life too much, he was growing up, and needed his space and privacy.
Twilight gave a sigh and went back to the kitchen, returning to her previous task. She fried two eggs in a pan, placing them onto two plates and bringing them out into the main living area. The smell of Twilight's cooking woke Luna, she initially struggled, unsure of her whereabouts but soon realised that she was in Twilight’s library and calmed down, removing the blanket from around her body she saw the cause of the smell in front of her on the table. Twilight was sitting opposite her on a chair and was already digging into her egg. Luna rubbed her eyes.
“Good morning Twilight.” Luna mumbled, still half asleep.
“’Morning.” Twilight replied, ‘for the Princess of the Night she certainly falls asleep early.’ Twilight thought to herself, finishing up her eggs. Luna stretched and began to eat her food, Twilight cleared her plate away while she waited. When she walked back into the room Luna was looking at her.
“Say, where’s Spike?” Luna asked, having finished her egg. Twilight gave a shrug and put Luna’s empty plate into the sink in silence. Luna was slightly concerned at her student's/friend's/something more’s silence but put it down to concern for her assistant, she thought that the sooner she started her lesson the better, at least it would distract her.
“So, I was thinking about starting our lesson now, what would you like to learn?” Luna said as Twilight sat down opposite her once more. Twilight perked up, remembering the book she was reading the night before.
“Oh yeah! I was interested in that elemental magic you mentioned, and I was looking for some reference to it yesterday, when we fell asleep reading on the sofa, I found something in one of the books that I think you should have a look at.” Twilight said in a rush, standing up, picking up the book from the floor and sitting herself back down next to Luna, in one fluid movement. Luna shuffled along the sofa slightly to get a better look at the book, and also slightly because she wanted to be closer to Twilight. Twilight opened the book and flipped through pages until she got to a diagram that took up the entire page, it was a black and white pen drawing, it was extremely intricate and they could tell that whoever had drawn it had an excellent eye for detail. It detailed a circle, split into four sections, each with a background of one of the four elements of fire, water, earth and wind. Each circle had a small piece of text, and upon closer inspection Luna saw that the text, whilst still being readable, seemed to be written in some older form of Equestrian. Taking a read she discovered that each text pertained to a location, though she couldn’t work out what the location was.
“Have you worked out what each text pertains to?” Luna asked after re-reading each section.
“No... I kinda I fell asleep.” Twilight replied sheepishly.
“Not a problem, now I know what our lesson will be focussed around.” Luna replied, setting the book down on the table in front of them.
“Can you get some parchment and a quill so we can write down possible locations? I think they’re very important, I’ve never seen this book before though, can I ask where you got it from?” Luna asked.
Twilight replied whilst walking over to her desk and retrieving the materials. “Well, I had found reference to a cave where a sorcerer, from back before the time of Discord, had hidden his unpublished works from the destruction that Discord wrought with his coming in another book. The book was brought in by a pony, who I suppose was a descendent of the sorcerer, and had recently found the book in his basement along with several other old artefacts. I trekked to the cave where I thought it was, and discovered it was blocked off by spell which was actually pretty easy to disable. This book here was in the chamber that was there, I brought it back and attempted to read it, but that was around the time when I was going to the Grand Galloping Gala, and I didn't get any time to read it, or have any incentive to until yesterday. I was just skimming through it and found this diagram, but then I fell asleep.” Twilight replied, setting the quill and parchment down next to the book on the table.
“I see...” Luna said, processing the backstory that she hadn’t expected. When Twilight once more sat beside her she began.
“Ok, I’m not sure how long this will take, I think it would be best if we did one first, and investigated it, before moving onto the others.” Luna said, Twilight agreed. They both looked down at the text in front of them, the one over the fire background. ‘Where water flows over uneven earth, steep will be the path, clouds may block your way in their independent dance across the sky, cave shelters the path of fire where stone shows face.’ They read, and re-read. Twilight had the quill poised above the parchment, ready to write out possible locations.
“Any ideas?” Luna said, from her tone Twilight guessed that she too had some ideas about where it may be but was doing that thing that teachers always do when they want to see what their pupils can come up with on their own.
“A couple...” Twilight said, not sure where to start.
“Ok, talk me through them.” Luna asked, settling comfortably into her teacher role once more.
“Well, it says that the clouds doing an independent dance, so I‘m guessing that it’s in the Everfree Forest, and then it says the way will be steep, so I’m guessing it is going to be on the side of a mountain, and the only mountain where the clouds are lower than the peak is the very mountain I had climbed with my friends to stop the dragon, however I think it is in a different cave, the only thing I can’t work out is ‘where stone shows face’.” Twilight replied.
“My thoughts exactly, I think that particular sentence though may be referring to an actual face, perhaps a carving?” Luna pondered. Twilight nodded.
The two spent the entirety of the morning working out more specific places for the cave to be on a map of the Everfree Forest that Twilight had got from the top shelf of one of the bookcases. They had managed to pinpoint three different locations where the first of the four locations could be.
“Hang on, before we do anything about this I have to ask, are you feeling up to it?” Twilight asked, turning to the mare next to her.
“I appreciate the concern,” Luna replied smiling back at Twilight, “but I think that I am mostly physically healed, it is my magic that I must recuperate, and besides, I have you to help me, don’t I?” Luna replied, smile turning to a sly smirk that Twilight couldn’t help but smile back at, even if she was slightly peeved at Luna’s disregard for her own safety.
“Ok, I trust your judgement. We should probably leave as quick as possible, though it would be nice to prepare some more, the pegasi have a storm on the way, the faster we get into the forest the better. I bet Rarity could help us.” Twilight said, standing up and pulling Luna up too.
“If you say so.” Luna said, she pulled in Twilight for a quick, awkward hug before releasing her with a blush. Twilight didn’t resist and returned the blush.
“Sorry, I couldn’t resist...” Luna said, Twilight grinned at her.
“It’s okay, it was nice.” Twilight replied, they stood in silence for a few moments more, unsure as to what they should do now. Eventually, as the silence wore on, they both unconsciously decided they should get going.
The walk to Rarity’s shop took slightly longer than if Twilight were alone as the two spent the entire walk talking in hushed tones, about what they hoped to find there and what sort of protections there may be. They almost walked straight by the door, distracted as they were in their conversation. It was obvious to Twilight by now, that Luna definitely knew her stuff when it came to magic, able to tell her how to disable every spell she could come up with, as well as telling her a few she had never even heard of. Twilight stopped abruptly, having realised they were at the shop, Luna took a few steps past the door before realising her companion had ceased movement and turned back to face the door.
Twilight rapped sharply on the white wooden door in front of her and almost immediately a voice called out in reply, “Come i~in!” Came the voice from somewhere within the boutique. Twilight opened the door with her hoof and stepped inside, Luna right behind her, Rarity walked out from a back room.
“Ah Twilight and... Moonlight was it? You know you don’t have to knock to come in! I’m always open to customers, not that I only think of you as customers of course!” Rarity said, setting down the fabric she was holding and giving Twilight a quick hug, it was a different hug than the one she had just shared with Luna, Rarity’s hug was just a friendly greeting, Luna’s was something... more.
“Thanks Rarity, we came here for... Wait, how did you know about Moonlight?” Twilight stopped, confused with Rarity’s knowledge, Rarity let out a slight giggle before replying.
“Oh you know gossip travels fast around here, and a new pony is big gossip, especially when she bears a strange resemblance to a certain princess, don’t worry though, your secret is safe with me.” Rarity replied. Twilight’s confused expression was replaced by one of gratitude and mirth.
“Thanks, Rarity.” Twilight replied.
“The reason we came here was about a sort of expedition Luna and I have planned, to help with my tutelage.” Twilight asked. Rarity nodded, knowing immediately what it was that Twilight was asking for.
“So what sort of conditions do you expect darling? Nothing too dangerous, I hope?” Rarity replied.
“Nothing too bad, but we need some stuff, like a tent for one thing.” Twilight asked, slightly guilty at having to ask Rarity so much.
“I did create a sort of outdoors wear a couple of years ago, including a tent, unfortunately most ponies don’t stray far from Ponyville so it wasn’t exactly successful. I’ve kept it just in case though, and you’re welcome to take it, I know I certainly won’t be using them.” Rarity said with a light titter. Twilight smiled at her, glad that she didn’t have to get Rarity to make everything from scratch.
“I’ll just bring them out for you two.” Rarity added, turning and walking back to the room she had just emerged from. Twilight glanced over at Luna and smiled, Luna returned the smile and was about to say something when Rarity walked back in, piles of material held aloft by her magic. She set them down in front of the two mares and then packed them into the saddlebags which she passed to Twilight and Luna.
“Thanks Rarity.” Twilight repeated once more.
“Think nothing of it darling, I’m always willing to help a friend in need.” Rarity replied, Luna thought that she too should express her gratitude.
“I too must thank you, Miss Rarity.” Luna said quietly, not used to speaking to other ponies much. Rarity waved a hoof dismissively.
“I did say I would be honoured to help royalty.” Rarity said with a smile, Luna returned it timidly.
“Ok, well we best be off now, we need to get a few more things before we leave and then we’ll be gone. I don’t suppose you could tell the others where we’ve gone?” Twilight asked.
“Certainly, but it's a bit difficult to tell them where you're going, when I don't know that myself, dear.” Rarity replied with another slight titter. Twilight blushed guiltily.
“Oh yeah, we’re going to the Everfree Forest, we may be a few days.” Twilight told her.
“I see, well take care you two, I couldn’t bear to see anything bad happen to you. And remember, your secret is safe with me, but the truth can’t be hidden for long.” Rarity said, walking back to a blueprint she had on the desk.
“Bye.” Twilight said, Luna nodded in farewell and the two left, Twilight thinking about Rarity seemed to be talking about more than Luna being a secret princess. Also, Rarity is exceptional at hiding her feelings when she needs to, but as a long time friend Twilight could tell that Rarity seemed nervous, she wondered whether it was concern for her or for Luna's condition, or both.
“Just the food and drink to pack, and we can get going.” Luna said as they walked back to Twilight’s tree house, interrupting her train of thought.
“Yeah...” Twilight said distractedly, thinking about what her friends reactions would be to the two of them.
short but good
you pulled something like a Deus ex Machina there with the book, it's not really a bad thing, it just feels strange.
another thing; shouldn't rarity (and her other friends when they hear about it) be a bit more concerned about twilight going into the everfree forest, i guess i could chalk it up to rarity not knowing of luna's condition and thus believing that twilight will be perfectly safe from everything the forest can throw at her.
otherwise it's a nice chapter!
i think rarity would be a bit more spaztic to mee a princess, even if she knows to keep it on the DL.
otherwise the plot train goes chugging along!
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Thanks!
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Well, I chose for them to meet Rarity, not only because she can supply them but also because she's good at hiding her true feelings, I tried to hint she was actually nervous by the fact that she tittered more than normal but I guess I should have made it more obvious. Thanks for the feedback!
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Rarity knows Luna wants to keep incognito, otherwise she would jumping on her.
Now that my Real life finally slowed enough to allow me to read this, i'll try to give some feedback.
I did spot one or two typo's and grammatical errors, but nothing major, so minor that i can't remember them.
The way Rarity behaved around Twilight and Luna seemed a little strange, even if it's already been pointed out.
You should have made it clearer that she was nervous.
I remember you posting a blog comment thingy about the decision to either make turn this story into a more "adventure" type story instead of the more "slice of Life-ish" kind that i started reading this story for.
I didn't want to drop in a comment on that blogupdate thingy after you've already made up your mind, but i felt like getting it said.
I liked this story for the fact that it was kind of Slice of Life-ish and lighthearted, but i trust that you can turn this into something good, the entire part about Elemental magic is good stuff, i've always had this thing for earth magic, Druids and stuff like that, so this entire change of story type might turn into a good thing.
These are just my 5 cents, but i'll throw them at you anyway.
To sum this all up, good, stable chapter with a few minor errors, but still a good chapter.
Also, Wat is dis spike doin. tell me, Nao!
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Thanks for the feedback, I reckon I'll go back and add in a small bit about the whole nervousness thing, as well as trying to find some of those errors. I hope to keep Twiluna the main focus of the story but I thought that it would be boring if I wrote only about their various times around Ponyville as I thought it had too much of that 'And they lived happily ever after.' sort of idea to it. And Spike will be discovered in the next chapter, .
Thanks again, hope you stick around with this whole change thing.
(I have so much work to do though )
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Looks like i'm the only one who likes to read those kind of happy ending slice of life stories, it's so calming and makes me feel all fuzzy.
So as i said, i'm not all too happy about the turn this story is taking, but i will keep reading.
Take your time writing, as weird as it may sound, Real life is more important then stories about fictional ponies.
quality over quantity!
i'll try to pinpoint the minor errors, but i can't guarantee anything, i'll edit this comment if i find any.
Good luck with the writing and your real life things.
Edit:
"She was about to do a spell that would show her where he was when (s)he remembered" just an S missing.
"but put it down to concern at her assistant" this here bothers me to no end, I'm not even sure anythings wrong, i want to put "but put it down to her being concerned for spike" and im not even sure that's any better. if this makes no sense, feel free too ignore it all together.
"she thought that the sooner" one space too much.
"but that was around the time when I going to the Grand Galloping Gala and I forgot all about it until yesterday" This is not really an error, but more something that i find VERY un-Twilight-ish. seriously? Twilight forgetting about a book that she went into a strange cave/dungeon to find?
This rustles my jimmies.
Edit in the Edit: "when i (was) going to the".
"Rarity said, setting down her fabric she (?) holding and giving Twilight a quick hug" i really shouldn't be doing this without having slept for a good 30+ hours. proof of that being, I'm not sure if WAS or WERE, that's how bad it is.
That's all i can find for now, and i'm sure i missed something that i found on my first read, BLEH, a few more hours, then bed.
Hope this helps.
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Thanks, I'm really sorry that it couldn't be completely a happy-ending style story, I will try to keep aspects of it in the story but there will also be this new element involved.
(Also, real-life sucks, if I do this work then I have to spend 5 hours next Tuesday working in complete silence on some ICT work, however this means I miss my Physics test which I will then have to do in my own time. Or if I don't do the work then I won't have the chance to get the ICT done but I get to do the test during school.)
Erm... sorry about telling you my life story but I'm sorta stressed over it, I'll be fine though.
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I don't mind the slightest, feel free to vent ^^
And as i said, get your real life issues straightened out first, then you can write horsewords :3.
also, not sure if you get a notification when a comments get edited, but my previous comment got edited with the errors and typo's i found.
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Thanks, no I didn't get a notification but I can see your edit, I'll go back and fix those errors up now.
Ok, i'm sorry but I think I missed something. Is Luna using a disguise? Because there is no way anypony wouldn't notice an alicorn. As I said, I think I missed something. If so, is she a unicorn, pegasus, or earth pony?
How does no one know Luna she is a alicorn there is only 3?
Your faithful student happydeath
This is one of those fics that just makes me happy when I read it. Thank you good sir, I needed some cheering up today.
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Im re reading this story because I kinda want so see if I can pick more from it.
This sentence didn't really make sense...
Try: 'Twilight noticed Rarity seeming to talk more about Luna being a secret princess.'
Great chapter, BTW!
Rarity knows some how. I mean that Luna and Twilight are dating.
Great story. I cant wait to finish this story than go on to the sequel!
6995889 and how sadly disappointed were you to discover the sequel unfinished and untouched in years
This story has 666 likes!!!!!
SATAN!!!
Well, now it doesn't.
Well, duh! A PARTY!