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Ok, not to sound like a dick or anything....but that 'tale'...i dunno, It just didn't sit well for me 'If we don't awaken the Elder Dragon, all baby dragons will be in danger!', Why are they going to be in danger?.
Also, you may need a Pre-Reader, I spotted a few errors here, some simple and easily done. Also, Also, when multiple people are speaking, every time a new character speaks, start a new line E.G: From this; "Good job, Spike. I knew I could get your attention somehow.". "By trying to hurt somedragon? That's not very nice, Rainbow...". To this; "Good job, Spike. I knew I could get your attention somehow." "By trying to hurt somedragon? That's not very nice, Rainbow..." This makes it easier to read and tell when someone else is talking.
Again dont make this seem like I'm a bad guy, I enjoy this story and want to help
710929 Yep, figured I may as well continue this story, because you people seem to like it alot 710956 Spike is plain cool to the bone 711380 You don't sound rude, at all. In fact, I really appreciate it Thanks, soon I will change some of these grammar faults ( If I'm smart enough to see them ) and other problems. Thanks for telling me
711473 if you need someone to pre-read your work, i'll be happy to scan over it and mark/change any mistakes I find Your Display pic still makes me ROFL
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IT UPDATED!!!! 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SPIKE!!!! dammit never question a blessing man just go with the flow-fooly cooly
Ok, not to sound like a dick or anything....but that 'tale'...i dunno, It just didn't sit well for me 'If we don't awaken the Elder Dragon, all baby dragons will be in danger!', Why are they going to be in danger?.
Also, you may need a Pre-Reader, I spotted a few errors here, some simple and easily done.
Also, Also, when multiple people are speaking, every time a new character speaks, start a new line E.G:
From this;
"Good job, Spike. I knew I could get your attention somehow.". "By trying to hurt somedragon? That's not very nice, Rainbow...".
To this;
"Good job, Spike. I knew I could get your attention somehow."
"By trying to hurt somedragon? That's not very nice, Rainbow..." This makes it easier to read and tell when someone else is talking.
Again dont make this seem like I'm a bad guy, I enjoy this story and want to help
710929 Yep, figured I may as well continue this story, because you people seem to like it alot
710956 Spike is plain cool to the bone
711380 You don't sound rude, at all. In fact, I really appreciate it Thanks, soon I will change some of these grammar faults ( If I'm smart enough to see them ) and other problems. Thanks for telling me
711473 if you need someone to pre-read your work, i'll be happy to scan over it and mark/change any mistakes I find
Your Display pic still makes me ROFL
711487 Yes, I would like that
pretty sweet first chapter
711702 Thank you
711496 I'll get it done tommorow for you
How you want it, via PM? or another way?
711746 I guess PM is the best. Thanks once again for helping me on this
711749 it's no problem
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711865 You made my face turn fc05.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2011/205/4/c/so_awesome_by_martybpix-d41igrm.png when I saw your picture
Hey Rarity did you hear Spike is Married
WHAT!?!?
Oh and he is some kind of awesome chossen sing dragon that is getting laid ever five min.
Spiks face when she said she wanted to see how much energy he had.
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718449 You made me lol so hard