Another HiE story. Mark was only home from college for a few days before he was unwillingly sucked into Equestria. Surrounded by technicolor ponies, Mark must deal with the politics and issues that come with being the only one of his species.
"Close your mouth luv or you'll catch flies," I repeat what she said to me earlier.
Yeah, I don't know what it is, but there is just something uniquely satisfying about being able to throw someone's words back at them sometimes.
"It's alright Twilight,"
One thing to watch out for with dialogue: if a character directly addresses another character by name, nickname, or some other appellation, the name/nickname/whatever needs to be separated from the rest of the sentence by a comma. In the above example, Celestia would say, "It's alright, Twilight."
the rolls i jusr readed the lat chapter than i see no more chapters so i click on read later and look what this story has another chapter
Yeah, I don't know what it is, but there is just something uniquely satisfying about being able to throw someone's words back at them sometimes.
One thing to watch out for with dialogue: if a character directly addresses another character by name, nickname, or some other appellation, the name/nickname/whatever needs to be separated from the rest of the sentence by a comma. In the above example, Celestia would say, "It's alright, Twilight."
Nice story so far.