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Red_Beard
I don't write much, but it's a nice past-time. I'm not committed to what i write much, often taking months long hiatus.
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Hopefully, one of those spells was not "Induce Lust" (or "Induce Estrus," for that matter).
6161325 I'm sure they would've avoided that for... obvious reasons
If you're using italics to indicate when the ponies are speaking in their own language, then you missed a couple of places: namely, when Twilight and Princess Celestia are introducing themselves, and when the doctor is speaking to Mark at the end of the chapter.
6161396 ah, yes, I'll correct that right away, italics don't cross over from Word, so I knew there were some places I'd miss.
Well, I'm interested to see where this goes. Good start so far.
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Well, you corrected the (lack of) italics on the doctor's conversation with Mark, but not the other place where italics were missing. That's my fault, really. I should've been more clear. This is where you need the italics:
i like it
6161924 I do too! What a coincidence!
The beginning chapter wasn't bad but the use of the word luv felt shoehorned in.
oh damn usually intros don't leave me interested on how this will affect the character's life.......but this
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6162134 well your coincidence is also coincidental like mine. Also we don't know the limit so try and estimate it and go for it. Though my own opinion I love stories that the author expand upon the canon and make their own. An example being A Zoologist;s Dream. This is just a thought and hope to see more.
someone saw the attack on titan abridged
6162452 There's a reason for that, it just hasn't been explained yet.
6162525 ayyyyy lmao
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its like he was trying to compete with Gunny Sergeant Hartman
6162576 that character is one of my absolute favorites. So much scripting and finesse went into his lines. And the fact he sounded like Patrick Warburton just sent it to hilarious levels. I laughed harder at that then any part of the dbza series.
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he is great, but if you want to find the person with the funniest IMPROVISED lines ever used search up full metal jacket all Hartman scenes
Should be "breathe."
I think you mean "content."
Extraneous "is."
I believe you want "humorous."
But other than that, pretty good so far.
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Also, I really appreciate the feedback. I'll get to correcting those when u get off work.
the rolls i jusr readed the lat chapter than i see no more chapters so i click on read later and look what this story has another chapter
One thing to watch out for with dialogue: if a character directly addresses another character by name, nickname, or some other appellation, the name/nickname/whatever needs to be separated from the rest of the sentence by a comma. In the above example, Celestia would say, "It's alright, Twilight."
Nice story so far.
Cute. So who's going to come in and find Twilight asleep on Mark?
6176979 Heh, I like the way you think.
Your avatar makes me think of william j blazkowicz
Oh,you lousy FUCKER! "luv" is something a retard would say. Were you dropped as a baby?
Maybe she should move to Manehatten, then. I hear they treat everyone equally there.
just pointing out there. technically he still wouldn't need food due to the fact that he's running off of magic and if he's burning magic off by moving around then hes just burning off some the excess magic, so wouldn't he just need to run a few laps every once in awhile or have a short exposure to the rock. Wouldn't Twilight be able to either make or get a hold of some sort of Geiger counter that would measure the amount of magic he has inside of him so he would know when he's getting to high of a magic level.
6179387 Patience my good man. There will be plenty of answers soon to come. Remember in the story, it's only been two days since he regained consciousness, and he's either been asleep or busy the whole time.
I'm really liking how this story is progressing. Keep up the good work.
6177469 No, it is something a brit would say. Or anyone who developed the quirk.
I think that it is a really good introduction through the cliché "portal." But then again by now it's pretty much impossible to not make the transport cliché.... Really good but please don't use words like "luv." to shorten words. Even if it is as if someone is saying more of a 'teenaged love' you should still type it normally. (unless it's in messages.)
That probably didn't make any sense at all..... Hey, I'm Swedish! Don't judge.
I have no idea why I love this fic in particular... But I do. (Even though the Twily/Mark feels a bit rushed...) Update soon!
6187322 it's actually a common english phrase used when addressing a friend of the opposite gender or a family member, like how americans use "sweetie" or "honey". It's often spelled "luv" as to not confuse it with a deeper meaning.
Absorbing both Chaos and Harmony. Some sort of magical equilibrium, something like perfect balance/yin-yang? I'm looking forward to where you're going with this...
I hope this magical absorption isn't permanent as it would only further isolate him from...most likely everyone. Being one of a kind does a well enough job on it own IMO.
Perhaps they can resolve this matter in a way that benefits both EQ and the protagonist.
Maybe it has something to do with his rather abnormal metabolism.
Definitely looking forward.
6259175 Digesting harmony and chaos. Why can I imagine a restaurant where you can order those things? "I'll have the friendship platter, with a side of discordant bread."
6306348 Actually, that's what I meant, and i think my phone (cus that's what i write on most of the time) autocorrected it to the vitamin. Thank you so much for noticing!
So wait... does chapter 7 still count? Not 7b though.
Hope we get another update soon. I find myself quite liking this story.
great work, liked and tracked. Can't wait tos ee how it turns out.
I'm fairly confident you meant pour.
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Thanks friend! Out for almost a year and nobody noticed!
Do what you can friend, we will be looking forward to it.
Ya know I surprised no one put his in the comments, so I will.
I was laughing my butt off when I read that too. Nice reference too btw.
Is this realistically going to be updated regularly or semi-regularly any time soon? Pondering whether to keep it on my read later list. Thanks!
7689259 I wish I could give you a good answer on that. I keep tabs on the story itself regularly, and I open word and start writing occasionally, but the inspiration just hasn't been hitting me as of late.
7689627 It's alright, I understand. Good luck with it though, maybe I'll see you in the feature box sometime. Thanks!