Forgive me, I was looking at the Popular stories and I couldn't help but notice this story's cover art and I had to drop by and ask...
WHAT THE BEEP IS THAT?!?
Again, if I'm taking up anyone's time here, I do apologize but if anyone can answer me that'd be great because I really have no idea what I'm looking at right now.
A few incorrect words and grammar errors, but overall very nice. If Rarity does make Coco into a succubus I hope it isn't done by something simple like biting her. If that's how succubi reproduce, they'd be everywhere. Also, she mentioned not stealing her soul, could she actually do that if she wanted, or are the 'demons' not as metaphysical as that? Note, I'm asking about your interpretation, that is, what is true in this world not general succubus lore.
6155973 Okay, that's cool, what point would stealing souls serve though? She feeds on lust, which she can clearly do without harming anyone, so why would she steal a soul at all? I guess I'll have to wait to find out.
6156124 Hehe, you haven't thought of a reason have you? That's why I'd leave it out or say it's not something they do, just one of those contradictory stories mentioned earlier.
61561246156167 Well, to be honest the soul is the very fiber of a being, creature, or lifeform. As such, if it is stolen, you can still use it for the same things you'd use the one it came from for. Such as feeding on the lust, this way there is no work involved, just drinking the lust straight from the source. Anyways, there is also the option of punishing the soul, as it is the fiber of the being it came from, so eternal torment for a horrible person, pony, etc. That however is just my thoughts on what it could be used for.
6156124 Also, sorry to say this, but I've noticed that you have a few errors in your writing. Misspelling, and a few times you've worded a sentence incorrectly. For example:
Rarity had just came into view.
This is mostly correct, the problem is the word 'came'. It's almost correct, but the right word for this sentence would have been 'come'. There are more, and I'm not trying to be rude or insult you about this, I'm just pointing it out so you'll do better next time. I really like this story so far, and hope to enjoy more of it.
She going to turn her into one?
6152689 Pshht! Spoilers!
Eh, like I care. Anyone reading comments should be aware of spoilers. It's pretty much in the description anyway.
6152690 It was a guess.
6152697 A good one at that. Or a lucky hit. I might be lying.
Forgive me, I was looking at the Popular stories and I couldn't help but notice this story's cover art and I had to drop by and ask...
WHAT THE BEEP IS THAT?!?
Again, if I'm taking up anyone's time here, I do apologize but if anyone can answer me that'd be great because I really have no idea what I'm looking at right now.
6154008 The name of the art is called Succubus Rarity. The link is in the down right corner of the picture.
A few incorrect words and grammar errors, but overall very nice. If Rarity does make Coco into a succubus I hope it isn't done by something simple like biting her. If that's how succubi reproduce, they'd be everywhere. Also, she mentioned not stealing her soul, could she actually do that if she wanted, or are the 'demons' not as metaphysical as that? Note, I'm asking about your interpretation, that is, what is true in this world not general succubus lore.
6155968 Yeah I got my own interpretation, which will be explained next chapter. Oh yeah, but stealing the soul is possible that much I give away.
6155973 Okay, that's cool, what point would stealing souls serve though? She feeds on lust, which she can clearly do without harming anyone, so why would she steal a soul at all? I guess I'll have to wait to find out.
6155992 ....Because they match good with potatoes?
6156124 Hehe, you haven't thought of a reason have you? That's why I'd leave it out or say it's not something they do, just one of those contradictory stories mentioned earlier.
"Intimidate" or "intimate"?
6156124 6156167 Well, to be honest the soul is the very fiber of a being, creature, or lifeform. As such, if it is stolen, you can still use it for the same things you'd use the one it came from for. Such as feeding on the lust, this way there is no work involved, just drinking the lust straight from the source. Anyways, there is also the option of punishing the soul, as it is the fiber of the being it came from, so eternal torment for a horrible person, pony, etc. That however is just my thoughts on what it could be used for.
6156124 Also, sorry to say this, but I've noticed that you have a few errors in your writing. Misspelling, and a few times you've worded a sentence incorrectly. For example:
This is mostly correct, the problem is the word 'came'. It's almost correct, but the right word for this sentence would have been 'come'. There are more, and I'm not trying to be rude or insult you about this, I'm just pointing it out so you'll do better next time. I really like this story so far, and hope to enjoy more of it.