first, and it was bad.

All right thanks for the criticism with absolutely no explanation as to why you think it is bad. Sorry you feel that way and hope you come back with valid reasons for your opinion, have a nice day

it was ok

6063180 Thank you for your input it really means a lot!

Alright now I'm really curious as to why this has 12 down votes? I still have to read the 2nd chapter but, I'm only here to judge the first one. It wasn't bad, you managed to write a seductive scene that was both hot and not pushing too bad. I knew what I was getting into because you gave plenty of warning. I happen to be a book worm so every now and then I read darker stuff and got curious about this and so far it was pretty tame so like I said I'm wondering at the down votes.

Now for my only critic. The seduction was a tad rushed. Maybe a bit more dialogue and cuddling or something. Seduction scenes shouldn't be rushed, just like real love you don't usually go straight from I love you to on your back, but that's really the only fix I see. Now on to chapter two to see what the fuss is all about.