5864597 It is getting closer to being equal at least, yay. I'm happy that you think it will live up to its potential, thanks again

Wow, I was expecting Tirek to be as evil as he is here, but I wasn't expecting him to punish any of the girls that disobey him by whipping them. I feel pretty bad for Scar right now

I’ll keep the girls away from her and keep my guys from bothering her too much, but in exchange you tale full responsibility. If she causes any trouble at all, you will take her punishment. Am I clear?”

That's pretty ominous...

“You can stay here tonight, nobody will bother you. If I have a client tonight, I’ll take them to your room.” Sunset sighed, “I’ll show you something, but you have to put it back when you finish with it and not let anybody see it.”

Iron Will, he’s one of the nicer guys here, gave me what is called a tablet in this world.

Sunset I know you're just trying to cheer Twilight up, but letting her use that tablet is not a good idea. Considering how absorbed Twilight gets when she starts reading, she probably won't notice if someone sees her with it and then you'll both be insome serious trouble.

I happened upon a couple errors while reading, so if it's alright with you I'll send a PM later after I make an error list.

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Wow, I was expecting Tirek to be as evil as he is here, but I wasn't expecting him to punish any of the girls that disobey him by whipping them. I feel pretty bad for Scar right now

Sadly Tirek is that evil, and more so going as far as to murder those who gets in his way.

That's pretty ominous...

Sorry, that should have been 'take' and its fixed now, thank you so much. Things will get a little worse for the two, but better soon as well.

Sunset I know you're just trying to cheer Twilight up, but letting her use that tablet is not a good idea. Considering how absorbed Twilight gets when she starts reading, she probably won't notice if someone sees her with it and then you'll both be in some serious trouble.

Sadly Sunset doesn't know that yet, and it could very well turn out to be a mistake. She may lose one of her very few possessions and pay the price for it as well. (Really hadn't planned on that, but it could help a lot in the next chapter, thanks.)

I happened upon a couple errors while reading, so if it's alright with you I'll send a PM later after I make an error list.

Thank you so much, I already fixed the one mistake you pointed out

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Thank you so much, I already fixed the one mistake you pointed out

Alright then, the list should get sent within an hour or so.

5866196 Thanks again

Interesting with it being big mac. Got a very big feeling that he is involved in the with the plot. I'm very curious how this will go.