(First fan fic, please don't judge harshly) just a normal 22 year old human, sent through a rift to discover a new sense of life, but what will this human discover about his own past in this strange new world? what secrets will his new life hold now?
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Well hope you get some nice sleep bro.
What is happening with this guy
I hate to say it, but for me, there is something wrong with this story. I got up to chapter 8, but it was a long and painful process. Sad thing is that I can't put my finger on exactly whats off on this story for me. The writings ok, the grammar is ok. I don't know what it is. There is a vagueness about it, maybe a pacing issue? What ever it is, i found myself easily distracted and having to reread sections, sometimes several times. It just couldn't keep my attention.
It does not deserve an Up Vote, but it does not deserve a Down Vote either.
Sorry
The Monk
“On her doorstep was Twilight Sparkle. While Derpy deeply respected the mare, like most in Ponyville, they wished she'd either switch to decaf, or start hitting the harder stuff.” -Dan_s Comments