I like where you are going wtih this. It was well written and in my sleep addled mind I did not see any issues with the writing. (Not sure if that is a good thing... hopefully!)
Although if you ever find time to write more that would be awesome! Now back to my writing cave! MUAHAHAHAHHA!
Not sure I can believe Twilight's never masturbated by around 16-18, but I can easily believe her being attracted to AJ in particular. And you wrote that well.
8658728 Thank you! You know it's funny, I don't know why I feel so strongly about those two Ponies together - they're in almost every story I write. I think of the girls as being close to 20, and I'm sure Twilight would have come across SOME books on sex in her travels that would have led to masturbation, but just as I am endlessly drawn into Twijack, I love the idea of Twilight being this sweet industrious earnest student who existed to make Celestia proud of her and to be the best unicorn she can. Basically she's a prude, something I can see in her character. I think I finally came up with a a story that doesn't involve Twilight and Applejack falling in love. - Twilight conjures a spell and messes up The 6 of them end up waking in as pony figures in our world...
I like where you are going wtih this. It was well written and in my sleep addled mind I did not see any issues with the writing. (Not sure if that is a good thing... hopefully!)
Although if you ever find time to write more that would be awesome! Now back to my writing cave! MUAHAHAHAHHA!
Good story so far!
Not sure I can believe Twilight's never masturbated by around 16-18, but I can easily believe her being attracted to AJ in particular. And you wrote that well.
8658728
Thank you!
You know it's funny, I don't know why I feel so strongly about those two Ponies together - they're in almost every story I write.
I think of the girls as being close to 20, and I'm sure Twilight would have come across SOME books on sex in her travels that would have led to masturbation, but just as I am endlessly drawn into Twijack, I love the idea of Twilight being this sweet industrious earnest student who existed to make Celestia proud of her and to be the best unicorn she can. Basically she's a prude, something I can see in her character.
I think I finally came up with a a story that doesn't involve Twilight and Applejack falling in love. - Twilight conjures a spell and messes up The 6 of them end up waking in as pony figures in our world...