-Chapter 4 1/2-
The green unicorn turned his back on the four stunned mares and walked out of their line of sight. He closed his eyes, focusing his magic to observe their long walk to the surface. Once satisfied that they had left, he returned to the forge.
After magically locking the door behind him, a bright blue flame erupted in the back corner of the room. The unicorn turned towards the flame unfazed and muttered under his breath “Perfect timing, as always”
“-an…he…ca…ke it” the flames sputtered, an ear-piercing buzz emanated as the flame brightened “There we go, just needed to adjust the frequency. ‘Allo, can you hear me now?”
“That I can” the unicorn responded “I suppose you wish to know the progress of the ‘project’”
“Wot, I can’t just call ta say, ‘allo?” asked the voice from the flames indignantly
“You haven’t” replied the unicorn angrily, there was a long silence.
“Sooo…how is the plan proceeding?” the flame finally asked
“Well, very well” replied the green stallion as he walked over too his anvil “I’ll have the Elements in eight days, whether they like it or not, and then we can move on to phase two”
“Hmm, phase two.” Said the mysterious flame “I’ll be arriving soon, but…”
“If ‘he’ follows you through the portal?” chuckled the green unicorn as he pulled the sheet from his creations “even he couldn’t affect our plans now.” Sitting on the anvil were two large gemstones. One pitch black the other brilliant white, both attached to golden necklaces identical to the elements of harmony.
A day later, at Canterlot castle an eerie noise echoed through the halls.
woooooshWoooooshhhhhWOOOOOshhhhhWOOOOOSHHHHH *DONG*
The guards never took notice of the took no notice of the strange blue box that materialized in the middle of the courtyard, or of the brown earth pony with an hourglass cutie mark, bow tie and fez that stepped out. “Well now, where to begin” said the earth pony with a gleeful smile.
Wat?
Wat?
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wat, good? or wat, bad?
698113
Wat wat. Maybe I'm remembering the story poorly, but... suddenly the Doctor? Seems out of place. I'm a Doctor Who fan (and a Doctor Whooves fan), but... not sure if want.
698158
Unfortunately, i can't blame this one on being poorly planned. I sorta had this idea from the start. And it may or may not be going down hill fast. I can't decide whether or not to TELL you just how bad this may become. If this turns out not be be your cup of tea, i apologize. But this is something i feel like i need to write, as a cap stone to things i wrote in the past that will NEVER BE READ BY HUMANS, PONIES, ALIENS, OR DOOR MICE! DEAR GOD THEY ARE BAD! But i want to finish, so i can write something...good...
Well, i hope you like it, if not, oh well. Can't please everypony.
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Don't apologize if your story turns into something I don't like. It's your story. You (hopefully) aren't writing it for me.
I just don't understand how the Doctor fits into this story. It's caught me off guard, and I can't make sense of it. It could be that you haven't explained what's going on properly, or it could be that I just don't get it because I'm thick (and I am pretty thick at times).
You're the writer of this story, you write it the way it wants to be written. If I decide to stop reading it, don't let that bother you. It's your story, not mine.
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yeah, this is a chapter happening in after four but from the perspective of a different character.
I had ACTUALLY planned on introducing the Doctor in ch 10 but the fact that ch 9 needed to be rewritten 3 or 4 times. I just could NOT figure out how to get the info i needed to, into the chapters. So i moved this up and 9 has been running smoother (more like sand paper now, as opposed to the hard side of the Velcro) and may or may not be done mid-week.
but yeah, if you'd like a small heads up on things to come, but wont be around for several chapters so you don't keep reading something you won't have interest in, just ask. I'd be more than happy to tell you (just not in the comments section of the story)
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I shall wait and see what will come. I think it would be best to judge the story itself rather than a description of the story.
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That means you'll keep reading than?!
Glad too hear it, i hope that this story doesn't jump the shark TOO quickly for you.
But trust me, this story WILL do so and it will jump it so hard the planet will move from the force of the landing.
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I'll keep reading until such time as I do not want to keep reading. That time has not yet come.
AAAAAAIAIIIIEIEIEEEEEEE!!!!! DOCTOR!
I'm loving this one. Thanks for your Shameless self advertising.