An old book Twilight finds inspires a strange reaction form Princess Celestia. Add to this, the fact that both Celestia and Luna refuse to tell where the Elements came from and you have the making of an adventure. Twilight and her friends journey to the last remaining mountain form a mountain range that, according to the book, vanished overnight about 600 years before Discord rose to power. What happened to the mountains? How does this relate to the Elements of Harmony? And most importantly, What will happen when they discover the "Truth"?
-Author's note-
well...uh...I'm kinda new to this. I've written a (horrible) fanfic before, but never put it on the web(and thank goodness it was lost when my computer crashed a few years ago)
I haven't written anything in a long time but I recently rediscovered how much I love it. I actually plan on this being the capstone to a to a project I've been working on for...oh god...tenish years. (more things i am glad are lost). It'll relate to the old story but explain itself as it goes. I'm not sure how long this will be, or how often i'll update or if it will even be interesting to anybrony but me. But I've haven't noticed any mean-spirited comments so far and hope that this entire community is as even half as joyful as it's inspiration
Feedback would be appreciated, but don't be too rough, I'm still easing back into writing and haven't gotten used to it again.
A big thank you too PhoebeJ for making this picture found at http://phoebej.deviantart.com/art/Mane-Six-263144329
Definately looks like your off to a great start on your fanfic career (...that's a thing right?) Very interesting story, felt like I was watching the show for quite a bit of it. Can't wait to see more from you on here, keep writing man!
I bit of foreshadowing about Twilight bringing the element along would have been good. It kind of came from left field, which is surprising since most of the information we've gotten has come from Twilight's perspective. Even so, the Element of Magic going missing is quite the plot twist. Celestia spoke about giving the elements back to someone, and now it seems that someone has taken one.
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...yeah, i had just started writing chapter 2 when i realized, i had no idea how to get the story going.
So i went back to chapter one and added the bit at the end.
So if it felt like i had no idea what i was doing, than you are absolutely right.
And if you think THAT was a plot twist. Wait until you read chapter....uh... not sure what number it will be.
Probably 4 or 6. I have a LOT of planned for this.
Thank you for the feedback
i look forward to seeing what people thin of the newly uploaded chapter 3
The first few paragraphs feel really clunky to me. I anybody can think of a way for that to be fixed or even if you think they're fin and i'm being overly critical, please comment below.
Love the story, the dialog is spot on, and with the exception of a few grammar errors (not that I'm one to talk on that subject) I'd say this is shaping up to be an increasingly interesting story. Keep the chapters coming, but try to get some sleep now and then too man
I really like the plot line so far. Maybe you could get an editor or use a grammar site (http://www.be-a-better-writer.com/punctuate-dialogue.html) to help smooth out the transitions a bit.
Also, you really should try and find a cover picture for your fic. Most readers that I know of usually skim over the stories without interesting images, and it's much more likely for your story to get views with an interesting visual hook.
Double spacing the paragraphs also makes the page more visually appeasing.
Overall, the story itself is fairly well written, and I hope to see more in the future.
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thank you my friend
i've been working on getting a pic but i am only an average artist
and i keep forgetting to check m deviant art page to see if somebody responded
Finally got around to reading all of the chapters. With the exception of some spelling/grammar mistakes (still fewer than anything I write seems to have
) it all looks great. Very interested in seeing how it all turns out (not to mention how long it ultimately ends up being) in the end. And, once again, awesome work with the dialog, keep it up!
Wat?
Wat?
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wat, good? or wat, bad?
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Wat wat. Maybe I'm remembering the story poorly, but... suddenly the Doctor? Seems out of place. I'm a Doctor Who fan (and a Doctor Whooves fan), but... not sure if want.
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Unfortunately, i can't blame this one on being poorly planned. I sorta had this idea from the start. And it may or may not be going down hill fast. I can't decide whether or not to TELL you just how bad this may become. If this turns out not be be your cup of tea, i apologize. But this is something i feel like i need to write, as a cap stone to things i wrote in the past that will NEVER BE READ BY HUMANS, PONIES, ALIENS, OR DOOR MICE! DEAR GOD THEY ARE BAD! But i want to finish, so i can write something...good...
Well, i hope you like it, if not, oh well. Can't please everypony.
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Don't apologize if your story turns into something I don't like. It's your story. You (hopefully) aren't writing it for me.
I just don't understand how the Doctor fits into this story. It's caught me off guard, and I can't make sense of it. It could be that you haven't explained what's going on properly, or it could be that I just don't get it because I'm thick (and I am pretty thick at times).
You're the writer of this story, you write it the way it wants to be written. If I decide to stop reading it, don't let that bother you. It's your story, not mine.
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yeah, this is a chapter happening in after four but from the perspective of a different character.
I had ACTUALLY planned on introducing the Doctor in ch 10 but the fact that ch 9 needed to be rewritten 3 or 4 times. I just could NOT figure out how to get the info i needed to, into the chapters. So i moved this up and 9 has been running smoother (more like sand paper now, as opposed to the hard side of the Velcro) and may or may not be done mid-week.
but yeah, if you'd like a small heads up on things to come, but wont be around for several chapters so you don't keep reading something you won't have interest in, just ask. I'd be more than happy to tell you (just not in the comments section of the story)
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I shall wait and see what will come. I think it would be best to judge the story itself rather than a description of the story.
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That means you'll keep reading than?! 
Glad too hear it, i hope that this story doesn't jump the shark TOO quickly for you.
But trust me, this story WILL do so and it will jump it so hard the planet will move from the force of the landing.
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I'll keep reading until such time as I do not want to keep reading. That time has not yet come.
AAAAAAIAIIIIEIEIEEEEEEE!!!!! DOCTOR!
I'm loving this one. Thanks for your Shameless self advertising.
I always loved how the Doctor meets people out of sequence.
First.