Inside the mind of Pinkamena Diane Pie
Interesting so far...
Grammar and sentence structure need a good deal of work. But other than that, it's alright.
You've intrigued me, something very few people have managed to do.
This needs quite a bit of editing done on it.
While the grammar and pacing could be better, I am intrested to see where this goes. Nice job!
Interesting so far...
Grammar and sentence structure need a good deal of work. But other than that, it's alright.
You've intrigued me, something very few people have managed to do.
This needs quite a bit of editing done on it.
While the grammar and pacing could be better, I am intrested to see where this goes. Nice job!