Hey,

Thank you all for your overwhelmingly positive responses! Anypony's welcome to point out mistakes, or to offer some critique, though, as I wish to develop as a writer.
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Lars, you are quite correct. Fixed, thank you.
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Eh-heh-heh-heh-heh-heh. Yes, well. The reference was intentional, and it does get a little 'cloppy' towards the end of the second chapter, I suppose...
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'Trixie x Trixie shipping? Or will it actually turn into Trixie x Chrysalis?': Oh, I have no idea what I'm doing. I'm just a typing-slave to the Queen Chrysalis and The Great and Powerful Trixie who live in my head (more strictly, I used part of my brain to model how I thought their brains would work, but a model of a brain is itself a brain, and like Dr Frankenstein I lost control of my creations...).
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Your MOAR, delivered as ordered.
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'"More equine..." loved that line.': I probably stole it from somewhere.
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"Okay, I'm hooked! Trixie's POV is hilarious (and then quite sad)": It turns out you can pastiche Trixie easily enough, and she'll come out like in the show. But if you actually try to write the Trixie in the show, you quickly find the scared, lonely little filly behind the cape (or maybe she just trixied me).
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"Well, they are voiced by the same VA. Same VA pair-ups are nothing new. Heck, why do you think there are so many AppleDash stories?": You learn something new every day.
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I'm glad you all like it.
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"Poor trixie , i already can see her heart being breaked": Into tiny pieces all over the floor. Or maybe Chrysalis won't let me. She doesn't like it when I try to take her stuff, and she really doesn't like when I break her stuff, and she tells me I really wouldn't like her when she's angry...

Yours,

JMH

At first Trixie was like , but then Trixie went

and then

It all makes sense now, no?

Brilliant chapter, I like seeing Trixie's love for herself turned to Chrysalis's advantage and Sinisteed's bit was really good .

.......................yum.

trixie sandwich

Hey,

Glad you liked it! Separately, good news! Somepony - somepony who is not actually a pony - was kind enough to copyedit these chapters for me, and there have been a number of improvements. Mostly in the direction of fixed spelling and grammar, so if you gave up in frustration after the first paragraph - I would've - then you may, if you wish, wish to try again.

JMH

Hey,

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You're going to have to unpack that 'going theory' for me a bit. I can sort of see how Trixie could be a changeling - she travels from town to town and seems almost pathetically needy for ponies to like her. But how does Pinkie Pie fit in?

JMH

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Okay. I see where the theory comes from, anyway. But I'm more in the direction of believing that if Pinkie Pie really wanted to conquer Equestria... she could. Anyhow, I'm going to bed now, so who knows what'll happen when that idea ruminates a bit. And it would make a lot of sense of that 'I've seen better' line - in the mirror every day, for example.

JMH

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Are you pitching this to me, or are you saying you're going to do it (not that the two are necessarily mutually exclusive)?

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I always thought she was some sort of accidentally mindwiped chaos god, ala Discord myself.
Pinkamena is HARDLY her most dangerous form.
It's when she PARTIES TOO HARDY that ponies are really gonna have to watch out for!
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Someone went and took that insanity to its logical conclusion, actually.

Haha holy shit what

Well, it's an interesting start... Let's see where it goes.

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This Trixie is a fascinating mess.

(Why DID the swarm have to use their faces....?)

was the mirror scene a reference to "smoke and mirrors"? or just a coincidence?

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In Chapter 2? It's something of a homage, yes. I thought I'd declared it explicitly at the tail of the chapter, but maybe not (I don't remember ). I know I'm missing more narrative debts than I'm acknowledging - no, wait, wait, that sounds bad. Let's call it 'laying easter eggs'.

JMH

Gah, if this keeps up my head will hurt and Twi will be confused.

Poor Sinisteed.

I'm quite sure Trixie's love for herself could power Chryssie to godlike levels.