HiE, gender bending, ponification. Derek chases Rainbow Dash through a portal. Twilight is nervous she is going to get in trouble, so tries to disguise him. The spell doesn't go as planned, and Derek wakes up a girl.
4804173 Grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing mixed with a generally disliked subject. Also, it's only a slight modification on the other story the author wrote—the protagonist even has the same name. To a lot of people, these issues add up to "sloppy self-insert only written for the author's pleasure." I'm just put off by the errors and execution, as content bothers me very little.
Come to think of it, there might be rules against resubmitting the same story under a different name, even if some of the chapters have been revised. I'm not sure if both stories are different enough to be safe. Why wouldn't you just edit the chapters of the first story? It's not like what gets published can't be changed.
Oh, almost forgot. A blood transfusion would get the genetic material transferred as well, and it would probably work better than sex. It might be tough to find the appropriate blood type, depending on how pony blood works. "Genetic material" is a pretty broad term.
I wrote the first story and was unhappy with it. The story did get quite a few favorites so I didn't want to remove it so those people couldn't read it anymore. I decided I would edit the parts I didn't like out of the first story and take it a different route. The original will be continned and lead in a completely different direction eventually, but this storyline is my priority.
Either I don't understand what a self insert is, or this isn't one. Of course if I were transported to Equestria I would never consider coming back. I would also have no qualms doing what the protagonist is concerned about either. Consider this a parallel narrative similar to the movie Clue's ending.
4804538 this is a good story I eagerly await the next chapter for this and the other story you wrote and that I liked and favorited is this the remake or is the other story? either way these are great stories I eagerly await the next chapters for these stories
This is a remake of my previous story. I received a lot of negative feedback saying I was rushing the clop so I rewrote it so one version would be more clop oriented and this one would be more centered around character development. I appreciate you nudging me for more content. It makes writing so much more fun when I know someone is looking forward to reading it.
I'm curious as to why this has so many dislikes.... seems fine to me o.O
4804173 Grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing mixed with a generally disliked subject. Also, it's only a slight modification on the other story the author wrote—the protagonist even has the same name. To a lot of people, these issues add up to "sloppy self-insert only written for the author's pleasure." I'm just put off by the errors and execution, as content bothers me very little.
Come to think of it, there might be rules against resubmitting the same story under a different name, even if some of the chapters have been revised. I'm not sure if both stories are different enough to be safe. Why wouldn't you just edit the chapters of the first story? It's not like what gets published can't be changed.
Oh, almost forgot. A blood transfusion would get the genetic material transferred as well, and it would probably work better than sex. It might be tough to find the appropriate blood type, depending on how pony blood works. "Genetic material" is a pretty broad term.
I wrote the first story and was unhappy with it. The story did get quite a few favorites so I didn't want to remove it so those people couldn't read it anymore. I decided I would edit the parts I didn't like out of the first story and take it a different route. The original will be continned and lead in a completely different direction eventually, but this storyline is my priority.
Either I don't understand what a self insert is, or this isn't one. Of course if I were transported to Equestria I would never consider coming back. I would also have no qualms doing what the protagonist is concerned about either. Consider this a parallel narrative similar to the movie Clue's ending.
4804538 this is a good story I eagerly await the next chapter for this and the other story you wrote and that I liked and favorited is this the remake or is the other story? either way these are great stories I eagerly await the next chapters for these stories
This is a remake of my previous story. I received a lot of negative feedback saying I was rushing the clop so I rewrote it so one version would be more clop oriented and this one would be more centered around character development. I appreciate you nudging me for more content. It makes writing so much more fun when I know someone is looking forward to reading it.
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rape is not everyone's cup of tea. many people cannot enjoy observing such action even if it was in fictional setting.