WOOO! I know I said this last chapter, but I SHIP THEM SO HARD YOU DON'T EVEN KNOW! :P
I'm always excited to see an update to this story!
Although I must admit, Octavia is becoming a bit too pure evil for my tastes. Y'know, evil because she's evil. She seems to have no good traits to balance her out. I sorta get the feeling you were trying to show that Octavia loved Vinyl and didn't want things to end up like this, but because Octavia was unwilling to admit she did anything wrong she got stuck in this situation, but it's coming out more like Octavia just doesn't care about Vinyl. Or anyone.
7564794 No, evil because she's used to getting things her way with just a small bit of harmless manipulation, and she didn't do anything wrong, but suddenly she's in jail and accused of rape, and there's no possible way she can allow herself to be as scared shitless as the situation probably warrants. Wouldn't you be a tight little bundle of defense mechanisms in that situation? I could imagine I would.
7564822 Not to mention that Vinyl is actually lesbian ...
Well, yes, I suppose I would. Either that or I'd be a little puddle of tears. But my point was more of, I'm having trouble empathizing with her. She doesn't seem very human (pony?) to me. That's what I meant. Sorta like a video game villain, they're there, and they're evil, and doing their thing to give the main characters something to fight against.
It's not necessarily a bad thing in a story for someone like that. It does, however, tend to come off a little rough when the story switches to her POV and grants us access to her thoughts. Then it's a tad... I'm not sure how to describe it. Off? Odd? Strange? I dunno.
I just mentioned it as a point to improve upon, that's all. Not as some slight against your writing ability or anything. I apologize if I came off as rude or something. I really am enjoying the story. I don't comment on stories I don't care about.
Heck, even stories I DO care about I don't comment on because I'm lazy.
7564989 No, you didn't come across as rude at all.
Unless people outright start hurling insults, I consider it a basic level of praise whenever the story engages anyone enough for them consider it worth their time to write down their thoughts about it. So sincerely thanks for your comments.
Wait, so the guards are just allowed to rape the prisoners?
Yeah, I also can't believe that guard will make one mare accused of rape not even get sleep till the trial, and other will get cozy wtih guard. This chapter was total wtf for me, like it was pulled from the other fic with similar premise. If in the next one it revealed to be Luna's plan, and Octavia realized that it wasn't her who charmed guard, but Luna who put him to it, okay. But if guards are allowed to rape prisoners, and Octavia just up and gets what she wants after getting arrested, that's... not what I'm reading this fanfic for.
Rusty has clearly gone rogue and is operating far outside regulations. And even though he arguably raped Octavia, she did make quite a concerted effort to make that happen.
As for Vinyl, note that nothing has actually happened to her so far, except for some vague threats and intimidation. What this actually leads to remains to be seen.
Ah well its just that it felt like the chapter heavily implied that whole thing, especially with Octavia's comment about Rusty's previous "whore" and the whole thing of the guards binding Vinyl so that Finny could have his way with her, although that was from Vinyl's mouth so that might not be true, but since your the author and all, I'll go with what you say for now.
WOOO! I know I said this last chapter, but I SHIP THEM SO HARD YOU DON'T EVEN KNOW! :P
I'm always excited to see an update to this story!
Although I must admit, Octavia is becoming a bit too pure evil for my tastes. Y'know, evil because she's evil. She seems to have no good traits to balance her out. I sorta get the feeling you were trying to show that Octavia loved Vinyl and didn't want things to end up like this, but because Octavia was unwilling to admit she did anything wrong she got stuck in this situation, but it's coming out more like Octavia just doesn't care about Vinyl. Or anyone.
Ooh Octavia is in for a bad time...
Though I'm not sure how I feel about a Vinyl/Finey ship. It's kind of... inherently masochistic on both of their parts.
Also, I have a feeling Octavia asking for that handbook will backfire. Badly.
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No, evil because she's used to getting things her way with just a small bit of harmless manipulation, and she didn't do anything wrong, but suddenly she's in jail and accused of rape, and there's no possible way she can allow herself to be as scared shitless as the situation probably warrants. Wouldn't you be a tight little bundle of defense mechanisms in that situation? I could imagine I would.
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Not to mention that Vinyl is actually lesbian ...
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Well, yes, I suppose I would. Either that or I'd be a little puddle of tears. But my point was more of, I'm having trouble empathizing with her. She doesn't seem very human (pony?) to me. That's what I meant. Sorta like a video game villain, they're there, and they're evil, and doing their thing to give the main characters something to fight against.
It's not necessarily a bad thing in a story for someone like that. It does, however, tend to come off a little rough when the story switches to her POV and grants us access to her thoughts. Then it's a tad... I'm not sure how to describe it. Off? Odd? Strange? I dunno.
I just mentioned it as a point to improve upon, that's all. Not as some slight against your writing ability or anything. I apologize if I came off as rude or something. I really am enjoying the story. I don't comment on stories I don't care about.
Heck, even stories I DO care about I don't comment on because I'm lazy.
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No, you didn't come across as rude at all.
Unless people outright start hurling insults, I consider it a basic level of praise whenever the story engages anyone enough for them consider it worth their time to write down their thoughts about it. So sincerely thanks for your comments.
Wait, so the guards are just allowed to rape the prisoners?
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Yeah, I also can't believe that guard will make one mare accused of rape not even get sleep till the trial, and other will get cozy wtih guard. This chapter was total wtf for me, like it was pulled from the other fic with similar premise. If in the next one it revealed to be Luna's plan, and Octavia realized that it wasn't her who charmed guard, but Luna who put him to it, okay. But if guards are allowed to rape prisoners, and Octavia just up and gets what she wants after getting arrested, that's... not what I'm reading this fanfic for.
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Um, no.
Rusty has clearly gone rogue and is operating far outside regulations. And even though he arguably raped Octavia, she did make quite a concerted effort to make that happen.
As for Vinyl, note that nothing has actually happened to her so far, except for some vague threats and intimidation. What this actually leads to remains to be seen.
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That's not really what the chapter says, though.
Well -- even though she is convinced that the position she's gotten herself into is preferable to Vinyl's, she may very well be wrong about that.
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I'm waiting for the followup chapter, it'll make this one great or bad, depending on what's next. High hopes though!
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Ah well its just that it felt like the chapter heavily implied that whole thing, especially with Octavia's comment about Rusty's previous "whore" and the whole thing of the guards binding Vinyl so that Finny could have his way with her, although that was from Vinyl's mouth so that might not be true, but since your the author and all, I'll go with what you say for now.
Can I expect a trial in the style of Phoenix Wright?
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I have to admit I'm not entirely sure what that is -- but I think Princess Luna wouldn't have much patience for it.