Nice first chapter.

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Thanks! In the process of making chapter 2 now

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Also, I am now your first follower.

Yay!

I like it but it needs more polish. Find yourself a good editor and that will go a long way.

Wow, this is your first story? Awesome.

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Will do

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Yup. Never wrote my own story before. I was actually nervous about posting it, but seeing how much attention this story has gotten is awesome!

Added your story to some groups, hope you don't mind.

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I don't mind at all

A decent concept, but the grammar and execution could use some work. Try not to mix past and present tense, especially.

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Thanks for the feedback I knew I would have a few problems here and there. I'm just surprised that I've gotten as many views and likes as it has

hmm, i like it, really
i need more

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Chapter 2 is in progress and should be finished in a day or 2. Glad you like it!

I hope this story doesn't get abandoned like other great stories out there, I'd hate to see this story be left alone and unfinished.

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Not a chance! I hate leaving things unfinished. And I'm engrossed in this story too much to abandon it

>>AnimeKid22 that's refreshing to hear. To many stories on this site get abandoned. keep up the good work!

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I will And thanks for the positive feedback

TwiDash are my favorite, and you certainly did a good job!

for a first i will say it was good

"A dragon watching over a castle to keep people out? How cliché Twilight."

I'm stealing that. Also, people? Isn't their society made of ponies?