Trixie shows up in ponyville again, well great now it looks like the elements of harmony have to teach her a lesson again...or do they. Join the gang and Trixie as they help her get back on her feet after hearing something unexpected.
"Oh so that's this mare's name" Trixie thought to herself. "Judging by her cutiemark it has to do with some classical instrument."
Based on the description of the house, this comment doesn't make sense. After all, their names are on the house.
Trixie almost started drooling just from thinking about it but she closed her mouth quick and made sure she was drooling on the table; that would be embarrassing.
Don't you mean 'made sure she wasn't drooling on the table'?
I was just priceless,
I think you meant 'it was just priceless'?
"OHMYGOSH OHMYGOSH OHMYGOSH, I can't believe I just did that but...it was just impulse and well he is rather cute."
Are Trixie and Rainbow Dash secretly related?
"Why ere you blushing before?"
Isn't it 'Why were you blushing before'?
These were the only mistakes I remember seeing. However, I do like how this story is going so far. Keep it up.
4283287 also with the cutie mark I just wrote it like that since she is there to visit and is more focused on something else that she would make a comment like that in her head. I know I would do something like that, cause I have before
4286580 It must have been unintentional cause it never crossed my mind though I'm assuming you meant the line from Vincent and the many names for his home right? also have a mustache
4293453 nope I was thinking the, "did you forget you keys?" With Octavia, she seems like she would be the most sheldoeske charachter in this MLP universe and Vincent would be Leonard in this circumstance.
Based on the description of the house, this comment doesn't make sense. After all, their names are on the house.
Don't you mean 'made sure she wasn't drooling on the table'?
I think you meant 'it was just priceless'?
Are Trixie and Rainbow Dash secretly related?
Isn't it 'Why were you blushing before'?
These were the only mistakes I remember seeing. However, I do like how this story is going so far. Keep it up.
Bold move trixie.
Ps: loved the big band theory refrence
4283287 thanks I'll be sure to got those errors fixed as soon as possible, just not near a usable computer at the time
4283287 also with the cutie mark I just wrote it like that since she is there to visit and is more focused on something else that she would make a comment like that in her head. I know I would do something like that, cause I have before
4291084 So Trixie didn't notice Octavia's name on the home? She was wondering about her name in her thoughts.
4291377 People tend to forget things when there nervous and or jumpy even things like that.
4286580 It must have been unintentional cause it never crossed my mind though I'm assuming you meant the line from Vincent and the many names for his home right? also have a mustache
4293453 nope I was thinking the, "did you forget you keys?" With Octavia, she seems like she would be the most sheldoeske charachter in this MLP universe and Vincent would be Leonard in this circumstance.
4302765 yeah I can see that now. I've only watch the show a couple of times so, not too familiar with the little jokes from the show.
4304321 oh well, the fact it was unintentional just makes it funnier!
Jumped to a random chapter to see if someone in equestria with the name Vincent was an actual thing in this story and then I said. Later.