"Still, I don't like it." said Ratchet, "I'm still picking up that strange signal, but I can't seem to pinpoint it."
"Relax, Ratchet." said Bumblebee, "We've already checked all the planets within 40 Parsecs of Cybertron. Twice."
"I't couldn't be Megatron, we all saw him die, thanks to yours truly." he said rather proudly, "But still, you have a point. If it isn't Megatron causing the signal, who could it be?"
"I don't know, Bumblebee, I just don't know. For now, we should wait. Perhaps more will be revealed to us later." said Ratchet with a sigh, "Besides, there is work to be done..."
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Princess Luna had recently acquired an interest in quantum physics, specifically, wormholes. Luna knew about space and stars and that stuff, but she also knew that space travel was far beyond their current technological level. Sometimes, during her night watch, she would use her telescope to stargaze. She knew how to use spells to locate and identify wormholes, but she hadn't expected to find one open up so close to Equestria. The wormhole looked like a firework that never ended, with green shooting out everywhere, and a blue tunnel shape inside. Before Luna could document any more about the strange phenomenon, something came through the wormhole.
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Deep in the everfree forest, a smoldering capsule lay among the trees, still hot from re-entry. After a few minutes, a door in the side started opening, but got stuck when it was half way open. "GAH! Stupid pod!" yelled a frustrated voice from inside.
"Calm down, Starscream, I will attempt to repair the door's circuits." replied another, more monotone voice.
"Don't bother, Shockwave, I will handle this myself." with that, Starscream blasted the doors open. "There," he said, emerging from the capsule, "That went easier than expected," he said, dusting himself off, "now all we have to do is find a place to set up shop." Starcream added sarcastically, "If only there were a place nearby that was sheltered, and discouraged any natives from entering." he said pretending to look utterly clueless.
"I sense sarcasm in your voice, Starscream. Elaborate." demanded Shockwave, in his usual, semi-monotone voice.
"Ugh. Never mind that, we have work to do. Locate the nearest energon deposit; it should be nearby. According to the archives, this is one of the main planets the decepticons hid their energon stashes during the war, but it seems sentient life has taken root here in our absence." Sarscream informed, with a hint of anger in his voice.
"If i recall correctly, Starscream, you said the natives here were too primitive to be of any serious threat." questioned Shockwave.
"I know what I said! that doesn't change the fact that they will probably get in the way later on. If, and when they do, I say we exterminate the closest village to scare them off. Besides, I could use some action."
"Very well, Starscream. The nearest energon deposit should be 580 meters in that direction." said Shockwave, pointing his finger southeast.
"Excellent. You go collect as many energon crystals as you can carry. I will scout around for a suitable base location. Chop chop."
"Starscream, I know more about constructing bases than you, and you are better equipped to carry energon crystals than me. The logical choice would be to send you to retrieve the energon crystals, while I find a site for the base." said Shockwave bluntly.
"You DARE question my leadership!?" Starscream yelled, taking an aggressive stance.
"Starscream, fighting will only weaken us further, and severely decrease the chance of our plan's success." said Shockwave with irritation.
Starscream growled, then finally nodded. "very well, Shockwave. I will fetch the crystals. But we need to hurry, dawn is approaching, and it will be easier for someone to spot us in daylight."
And with that, they set off.
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Luna watched, horror stricken, as the strange object entered the upper atmosphere and, at a surprising rate, burst into flames due to the air-friction. The object appeared to be roughly she shape of a cylinder, a really big cylinder, and some sort of device on the back with a series of tubes and a nozzle at the end of it. The capsule roared past, missing the castle by only a few hundred feet, then crash-landed in the middle of the everfree forest. I must tell my sister, she thought, This could be dangerous.
-THE NEXT DAY-
"And then it crash-landed in the middle of the everfree forest." Luna finished with a worried tone.
"I see..." Said Celestia in a thoughtful tone, wearing a perfect poker face, "Well, sister, you were the one to spot it on your nightly watch. So as the princess of the night, what do you think we should do?" Luna seemed taken aback by this question.
After a few moments, that felt like hours, Luna finally broke the silence "I-I think we should send a team to investigate." said Luna, quickly regaining her posture
"By day or by night?" asked Celestia
"By night, To avoid frightening anypony" Luna answered decisively
"An excellent proposal, sister." said Celestia, with a smile.
-THAT NIGHT-
"You are to go and investigate. recon only if you see anything dangerous, you are to report it to me right away," Luna said, drilling her recon team, which consisted of 4 stallions, all pegasi, in jet-black uniforms, with cammo painted over. "Is that understood?"
"Mam, Yes Mam!" they all said, in more or less perfect union. But as they set out that night, none of them was expecting the horrors that awaited them.
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3905203 glad to hear it. i didn't expect so much positive feedback so soon after finishing it, and I have never even written a story before. LOL
3904624 actually, I do have an editor
I must say, this is a good fic... Although, a bit rushed, but still pretty good. I'll certainly be following this story and see where it goes. While it may not be as good as the 3 other fics, this one is definitely nothing to sneeze at. Very good job. BTW, you misspelled "Deceptacons" for "Decepticons." Had to be picky there.
3905434 Thanks, and yeah, my transfan friend told me that. what other 3 stories?
3907400 It's "Transformers Prime: Friendship is Magic(A Hub crossover special)", Transformers: Fall of Equestria, and Transformers: Equestria's Darkest Hour. The two last ones are somewhat bloody, and minor gore. But the first one is none at all gore.
You may have never heard of them, they're cool to read. But, I'm giving you thumbs up for effort.
3907692 A funny thing is, my friend who is not a brony, likes this story so far. He hates Trixie. The reason being because her voice is just so darn obnoxious. He wants me to kill her off sometime in this story. I am currently trying to decide wheather to kill her off, SERIOUSLY injure her, or not even have her show up in the story. opinion?
this will sound weird, but I want SOMEONE to die, not Optimas, Bumblebee, Starscream, Shockwave, or any of the transformers characters, because that would spawn repercussions in the movie Predacons rising. Obviously not Rainbow dash, or any of the mane 6, but someone...
3908435 Out of curiosity, why kill some pony? While I had faved a fic or 2 that did have a pony die, I still dread the thought of a pony dying.
3908603 meh. I don't know, somethings wrong with me. but when *SPOILERS ROMOVED FROM THIS SENTENCE* somepony(s) will HAVE to at least get hurt
3908636 I'll admit, no pony is spared from pain. But death is something that I cannot stand to see. Especially with an innocent race like the equestrians.
3908751 Now I feel bad for even suggesting such a thing but hey, at least i didn't write cupcakes, or rainbow factory. Both of which i cried after reading.
3908759 Ugh... Who even lives with a mind like that? It really makes me want Optimus Prime to demolish the factory... And cure Pinkie from the curse.
3908774 Hmmm... that can be arranged
3908777 Lol, have Optimus destroy the entire factory, while Celestia imprisons the sadistic ponies. No better yet, become banished.
3908786 "such villany CANNON go uncorrected. Ratchet, open a spacebridge to equestria. STAT"
Meanwhile at the rainbow factory
"Any last words?"
"... you have beautiful eyes" Scootaloo said, defeated. just as rainbow was about to flip the switch, CRASH
"Halt, you will cease to destroy lives, or i will be forced to destroy yours." came a strong voice.
-5 MINUTES LATER-
the whole factory lay in shambles. never to be used again. THE END
3908810 ... heheh...hahahahahHAHAHAHAHHHHHAHAHA. !!!!!!!
3908822 that was the short version.
3908810 I'm sorry, but that was just too funny the way it was done. Rushed randomness, lol!
3908827 that was the point. Im actually watching transformers prime right now, so I have Optimas' voice fresh in my head
3908832 OK, but good job. Lol, oh my gosh.
3908845 did you get my message?
3908848 Yeah, I did.
3908852 funny? good idea?
3908854 Worth a few lols.
3908870 anyhow, stick around, because it is highly likely I will be finished with chapter 2 sometime in the next 20 minutes...
3908876 Lol.
3908883 LOL LOL LOL why are we laughing?
Don't expect too highly from me though. I'm fairly new to this site, about a few months old. Still haven't written my first fanfic.
3908887 I don't know... Pinkie infection maybe?
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3908901 you think YOUR new? I havent been registered for more than a WEEK and I've ALREADY wrote a fanfic! LOL
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3908929 lol wut?
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"Still, I don't like it," said Ratchet."I'm still picking up that...
"Relax, Rachet, said Bumblebee. "We've already checked all the planets..."
"It couldn't be Megatron; we all saw him die, thanks to yours truly," he said rather proudly.
Same thing as stated above with the commas and periods.
"And that stuff" sounds far too out of place if you're trying for a serious atmosphere.
That must be one actuate telescope, or one big wormhole.
Circuits, said another...
." With that,"
You used "said" too much. Try using some other words. For example:
"There, he said, emerging from the capsule. "That went easier than expected... Now all we have to do is find a place to set up shop," he added as he dusted himself off.
(Don't quote me, just giving an example.)
Same with commas here, and who is "Sarscream"?
"deposit; it should be nearby."
Said! That doesn't"
Same with commas.
hurry; dawn is approaching.
You should mention this is back to when Luna first saw the thing.
Are you telling me that a thing falling from the sky and barely missing the castle, didn't wake up anyone?
You're saying Luna waited until morning to tell Celestia that she had seen something fall from space and crash into Equestria?
Commas.
Commas, but I don't think that was 100% necessary.
Anypony," Luna said.
I don't think Luna would say "recon" as she's been away for a long time and most certainly doesn't know modern military words.
four stallions. It's best to write out numbers one to one-hundred.
Them were expecting.
I might have missed some stuff, but I think that about covers it.