Nothing negative to say. Fucking awesome.

I was scared for a second when hooves were messaging her back i expected this to happen:
Bonbon: LYRA I SAID-.... Bonbon at there sstaring at what looked like a dead pony. She was just emaging things. She HAD to be!
Zombie: Raaaaaaaarggggg
Bobon: Uhh......Hi?

A couple seconds later the group that had been traveling with bonbon heard a shrill long scream coming from the room bonbom was in.

Aside from the lack of spacing, a very solid first chapter. Will continue reading.

Nothing negative to say. Fucking awesome.

As Bruce Campbell himself would say, "Groovy!".