A single event opens the eyes of Twilight to something she had, for so long, denied. The depth of the love she discovers will forever change what she values and will lead her on the first steps of a journey that will affect the future of Equestria.
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Yeah that jump just happened. I don't know why, but it does matter a lot in the future...
It's supposed to be a flashback to Twilight getting really stressed out. I was hoping to show just how unbalanced her life is/was. I'm trying to give weight to how much her love for Applejack is changing who she is and how she sees herself.
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Woah. I really can't go into what your comment means to me, just know that you made my week. And then some. You said everything I've been hoping to hear since I started this.
I just saw it as I posted
The next chapter!
Interesting to see Twilight gain a rival... I hope that she doesn't grow too catty over it. I'm impressed that she's kept her hopes as high as she has, after AJ has made multiple comments as to her personal preferences. Of course, AJ has also been sending some mixed signals as well...
And I never need an apology for a long chapter!
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The last few comments I've received (including yours) have been very helpful in giving me guidance as to how others are seeing this story. I'll be using them for help as I move forward.
Twilight is, for the first time in her life probably, living minute to minute. She is acting purely out of romantic love, in other words she's utterly clueless...
Nicely done so far. maybe a bit too much drama, but I don't care.
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WOOO! You did post a new chapter!!!
Okay... but I have stuff I need to to so I can't read it just yet...
[later] ok now I read it!
love it, though I feel sorry for twilight!
parts of this makes me mad at AJ but I don't want this story to change at all!
I had a prediction that AJ is going to get her memory back and act like she has still lost it just to stay with Twilight longer....
I can still see that happening but it looks like its going to go on a different route than I thought...
either way I still cant wait for the next chapters! should be interesting to read.... and I oh so hope she tells Rainbow, i would love to see the look on her face!
oh and I prefer chapters with 6k ish words in them... but if they are shorter I expect more uploads... so i guess its good either way to me
I know it's not a Beatles song and the backing vocals and strings make it a bit schmaltzy. But if you replace the word hoof for hand and mare for guy, this is pretty much what's in Twilight's heart right now...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_s3ecXkIhNo
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First, thank you very much for staying with the piece, it's my first. Secondly I will never do that again but your reaction is exactly what I was hoping for. When Spike returns he discovers a Twilight that has lost all perspective. ALL perspective. She needs a straight acket. The tone shift was jarring - it was supposed to be, BUT maybe that's just not good writiing.
Macho, I have to come clean - the damn scene basically wrote itself and every time I went back to try to change it, it kept getting darker. The image of Twilight from "lesson one" kept appearing in my head and I kept asking "What would happen if the stakes were more than being late with a letter? Like if they involved a three day exam covering most of what Twilight knew?" Twilight struck me as being on a razors edge there. She ended up getting dangerously silly but she could have gone dangerously dangerous just as easily
Btw, that exam scenario is taken from the structure of the Cisco CCIE certification test.
I'll comment more about this shortly but your views and comments are invaluable to me. Thanks
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I just wanted to let the faithful know that I have not forgotten this story. Everyday driving to and from work I talk it out with myself and I work on it if not every day then every other day. I think I would just about pay someone to let me write about the ponies. It's such a great escape from the somewhat intense challenges I have in my life.
I should also say that this story is not a rambling tale. It is fully developed, beginning to end and right now we are just past the half way point. Since the plot is complete it allows me to work on several parts at the same time, which is nice. Hopefully it means that all the plot points will tie up nicely at the end.
I have had quite a number of other ideas for Pony stories, some short and funny, some adventures, some slice of life, but nothing on the scale of this.
If you're reading this then you're still following me, and for that I'm grateful. The next chapter should be done within the week... (<-AJ's lack of faith notwithstanding...)
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You've read the whole story so far? And you think it's beautiful? Then I'm doing a really good job.
Thank you just doesn't cut it, but it's all I got.
Thank you.