I'm... vaguely interested.

Go on...

I've never read anything like it to be honest. I find the way how Rainbow Dash enjoys watersports very intruiging. I'm certainly eager for what the next chapter will bring.

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Son of a bitch......
Tireder? TIREDER? What the hell kind of word is that?
You need a proofreader. Badly. There were a lot of mistakes. And it's NOT gonna be me.
My friends made me read it aloud. I want to kill myself now.
Interesting concept, though.

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A lot of mistakes? I went through the story several times and didn't see much of any.

Also Tireder didn't so up in the spellcheck (And it still isn't.) So I figured it was actually a word.

I LOVE LOVE LOVE your story. It was a great concept and pretty good execution, though there were multiple spelling and grammar mistakes. One other comment, pee doesn't come from your vagina... I really want to see more!

3464496 Remember young padawan: I did the same thing to my massive story when I first wrote it.

And then I realized it was crap.

And so I redid it adding twenty thousand words.

And it was still kind of meh.

And so I am redoing her a third time.

You grow and grow as an author, and just because you don't see it now doesn't mean you won't see it later. Read a lot, and write a lot, and always try to write professionally, and eventually you will see all of your earlier stuff as crap. And either you will forget about it, or like me go OCD and am fixing it.

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I never heard of the word tireder. I'll just give one example of a mistake.
wouldn't of...
Correction: wouldn't have...

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I understand that, which is why specifically said 'urethra' at certain times. I try to keep it noob-friendly though and not use specific or any words that are too technical (I.E 'holding muscles' instead of 'external urinary sphincter'. And vag/pussy instead of vulva, which is the actual correct term that's used to describe the entire part.)

I might change that though depending on what people think.

Kinky chapter can't wait for more :)

3464737 ok, that makes loads more sense

Will any of Rainbow's friends be participating in the golden fun?

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Possibly in the future. I can see this getting repetitive if I don't add more ponies lol.

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Didnt expect to see you here.

You like watersports?

3467608 Heh...

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Nothing to be embarrassed about, and I kind of suspected it after a few lines in EEE. Would love to see you write some, even if its with an alt.

3469505 KiltedKey: Known enough that one of his followers eventually notices his comment in a random fetish story. Not sure if gusta, but it certainty is making me... blush.

I... uhh... might be into it a bit? The pee jokes with Rainbow Dash? I guess so. Heh... Heh...

And I noticed that you like them from your favorites list. I need to look at the clop on mine. I haven't read a lot of them.

I could never write one. Not that I don't think I couldn't write something incredibly messy, but in that it's not - I think? - a big enough audience, it's too out of character for even my own writing, I'd feel awful doing it, and my writing style is well known unless I were to attempt to change my narrative style. Even then, my sentenxe structure is predictable and so are my descriptive words.

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Yeah, Im afraid my favorites list is a bit telling of my preferences .

Its a bit of mess, I either forget to favorite something I liked, and then forget its name, OR I favorite something I'd rather wasnt public.

However, the hardest part about the fetish stories is finding them, so I prefer not to lose them.

Your favorites, however...

Holy hell, thats a lot of favorites.

*A lot of favorites going into Read Later.

3469694 Not... really. I'm on the lower side.

Most people have two hundred plus, and quite a bit of them I'm just seeing if they will be updated. I usually don't read stories until they are complete.

And your list is very small. What makes you clop makes you clop. Rape and guro is pretty much my line drawing.

Woah... That, my friend, was a good fic ;)

I dint think I would like this but now I'm hooked... but the funniest part was the last sentence after tHat I died out laughing after that

This is interesting but. I think you might want to think about changing it up. You really overused "holding muscle" how about groin muscles internal muscles and the like.

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I think we actually share that in common.

I can live with any kind of fetish, as long as no one is getting hurt (and not liking it), and its consensual.

While I enjoy the subject matter, I think it is better to learn the names of the body parts and functions so that one term isn't used continually (i.e. holding muscles). If a mare's genitalia is similar to a human female's, we have PC muscles which we strengthen by doing Kegel exercises during sex or urination. You refer to Rainbow Dash grasping her vaginal folds, but I think you meant her VULVA and LABIA. The vagina is internal and not visible to her view. And while holding pee may be pleasurable, it can also cause infections to occur. I was also curious why you referred to her state of nudity. Do ponies usually appear clothed?

With regard to editing, arousal would suffice for 'arousement' and 'spasmed' is possibly still a word. Spell-check only picks up on misspelled words and not on those taken out of context, so if it's an actual word but not the one it should be, this won't be caught. There are still typos and if I reread, I can find them all.

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While I enjoy the subject matter, I think it is better to learn the names of the body parts and functions so that one term isn't used continually (i.e. holding muscles). If a mare's genitalia is similar to a human female's, we have PC muscles which we strengthen by doing Kegel exercises during sex or urination. You refer to Rainbow Dash grasping her vaginal folds, but I think you meant her VULVA and LABIA. The vagina is internal and not visible to her view.

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"I understand that, which is why specifically said 'urethra' at certain times. I try to keep it noob-friendly though and not use specific or any words that are too technical (I.E 'holding muscles' instead of 'external urinary sphincter'. And vag/pussy instead of vulva, which is the actual correct term that's used to describe the entire part.)" Not to mention I like the current words used much better despite being incorrect. I might change this though.

And while holding pee may be pleasurable, it can also cause infections to occur.

>Implying anything is realistic in Equestria. #Reality
I thought about mentioning this but I figured it would be best not to. (The whole point of this fic in the first place was to be a "Horribly" written clopfic, and I didn't want it to get too technical; this was simply for arousal.)

I was also curious why you referred to her state of nudity. Do ponies usually appear clothed?

You must've missed the anthro tag. I don't blame you though I've missed that before too lol.

As for the typos I might have to find someone else to fix that as I've already gone through the story twice, and my grammar must already be too horrible for me to notice anything else wrong.

Dude, that story was awesome. The low upvote–downvote ratio is unbelievable.

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Eeh. There seems to be several grammar mistakes and I'm sure I over-used alot of words. TY for thinking that though.

I know a guy who is really good at description though so I might have him go over the second chapter and revise it.

3524139 when more?

When are you adding another chapter? I just re-read this for like the fifth time and I can't wait for more!

*Waves a hand at you, signalling for you to shoo*
Well, go on now! Write another chapter!

Are there any Rainbow Dash wetting stories that don't have nudity or explicit content? I don't really care for all that, and I prefer for them to be wearing something for it especially if they're in Anthro or human form. I'm not a big diaper lover either, but panties are fine
I didn't see any chapters for her in To Boldly Pee (in which my favorite chapters were Pinkie Pie and Princess Ember, even if the damage was minimal with them) or I'm Gonna Pee Myself No Matter What I Do (in which case only Twilight and Sunset really wet themselves, which I found disappointing in Fluttershy, Rarity, and Pinkie Pie's chapters).
And I'm not a very good writer, so I couldn't do it myself, even to think of such a scenario for her.