Well i love me some good necro-gore story. But even if i ignore the poor English i cant ignore the fact that this story is bad. If it was gore-fic without the clop part it would be +4/10. But as it aspire to be a gore-clop-fic its -3/10 (if you never written any story add +1 to the rating). The sex/rape, it lack details, when you write "he fucked her pussy- there was blood- she died- The End". Try to get it going for longer, include some details of the scene and sex. Also you should get someone to help you with English as some of the things you write are hurting even my eyes. (i never learned English so i also write shity sentences and i wont judge you for it)

Dude I'm sorry, but as soon as I see holocaust I just...

God man I gotta... I gotta...

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This story's dislike rating blew up after than 9/11.

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I wonder..... why does this need to be an MLP fanfiction? It's so unlike the show that I almost forgot I was even reading a story inspired by the Friendship Is Magic universe.
Not insulting your story, sir, I was just wondering why this really has to be an MLP fanfic.

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I guess I enjoy writing grimdark stories.