Subject Delta - Rapturous for Equestria

by TheMightyT

Escape... (Chapter 1)

Subject Delta – Rapturous For Equestria

*TheMightyT*

-\Edited by Reiver/-

Chapter 1: Escape…

“Love… love is just a chemical, no matter the origin. We give it a meaning by choice.”
-Eleanor Lamb
***

He needed to defend her, his Daughter. It’s was the last stand, and after that they were going to be free. Leaving Rapture, it was deemed impossible, but it was anything but that. He thought about Subject Omega; no, he thought about the man he once knew as Augustus Sinclair, the man who gave him a way out. Augustus’ last words were words of thanks, before giving him the key he needed to finally leave Persephone, to leave Rapture. Augustus’ death was necessary in many ways, but Delta had hoped he didn’t have to kill the man who had helped him along his journey. But he would not let Augustus’ death be in vain. They were going to escape this madhouse...

Augustus Sinclair may have been the favorite of Andrew Ryan, as they were both shrewd businessmen, but Sinclair was not stupid. He always had a plan B for everything he had done in his life, evidenced by the escape pod he had placed in Persephone. Like Augustus once had said: “Technically, Utopia shouldn’t have much use for a detention facility…”, but if Andrew Ryan thought he needed a prison in his Utopia, then Sinclair would built one... for the right price, of course. Augustus was a man of hollow morals, the only reason he came to Rapture was one of monetary gain. But, even a man without any kind a morals or ethics can become an ally, so long as he regains his investment in the end. Augustus Sinclair would not escape his own prison, but at least the one he helped get this far would have a chance.

Eleanor just needed more time. The words of Sofia Lamb, Eleanor's mother, resonated through the room: “You would rip my only daughter from her home and family and feed her to a world without hope. Though Utopia may die with her, I would sooner see us fall. Goodbye, Eleanor. Mother will be waiting for you.”

Subject Delta didn’t have to much time to ponder upon the words of Sofia Lamb, the voice of his daughter stopping his thoughts: “Here they come, Father! Hold them off until I can bring it to a boil!” It seemed the fighting wasn’t done yet. Just some more time, that was all they needed.

Death was waiting on his doorstep, already raising his scythe in the air. He couldn’t go much farther, everything was becoming a burden too much to carry. But he had done it, the last of Sofia’s Family laid dead, their blood spilled on the floor of the once beautiful city. Eleanor called out to him: “I’ve done it, Father! The ballast water is gone! Release the docking mechanism!” His job was never truly done. Some more members of the Family jumped down, seemingly coming out of nowhere. He didn’t care anymore, making quick work of the Splicers with his drill and plasmids. Nothing could stop him. Not now.

The screeching sound of the locking mechanisms brought a feeling of relief. They were going to make it. “The elevator to the lifeboat is flooded, Father! We have to equalize the pressure in there or the door won’t open!”, Eleanor yelled out to him, “Destroy those glass tubes to flood the room!”

Destruction was all Delta had know of late, and without thinking he destroyed the glass tubes overhead. The familiar feeling of the water pressure against his suit told him he could stop shooting, his vision being blurred by the murky water. He dropped his Rivet Gun, he would not need it where they were going. “We… we’ve done it, Father. We’re launching! Get to the elevator!”, Eleanor said. He moved through the water, to his Daughter. They were leaving…

The elevator was going up. His Daughter was standing next to him, in the Big Sister suit he got for her. He wanted to hug her, but before he could do anything the elevator shook violently, bringing him to his knees. His body was giving up, the Pairbond broken and the his injuries from the fight before catching up with him. A muffled voice shook him out of his thoughts, hands helping him on his feet: “The bombs, Father! We’re falling! Run!” And with those words the elevator door opened, and they ran. His Daughter was faster than him, and rounding the corner of the hallway leading to the escape pod he saw her… stopping. Her way was blocked by a pile of bombs, and as she turned around, looking at him and reaching her hand out to him, the bombs exploded. The last thing he saw was the bombs going off, his Daughter and a purple flash. And then darkness devoured him.

***
“The Rapture dream is over…”
***

“Come on, Twilight, you can do this,” said the purple and green scaled, dragon-like creature to the purple mare.

“Long distance teleportation is not an easy feat, Spike,” said Twilight to her enthusiastic assistant.

She was reading a scroll, a check list of sorts, double checking everything she needed to do to make this work.

“You’ve been preparing for this for weeks, reading every book you could find about teleportation. Princess Celestia herself gave you advice on how to do this!”, said Spike, who saw that the mare was beyond being nervous.

But she was always like this, especially when learning a new feat of magic. Although, technically speaking it wasn’t a new feat of magic, as Twilight already had mastered teleportation some time ago. But long distance teleportation was known to be incredibly difficult, as the only ones who were able to pull of this feat were the Alicorn Sisters themselves. Even though Twilight was very powerful, as magic was her Element, she kept on doubting herself.

“This isn’t something you can learn out of a book, Spike,” Twilight said, not even looking up from the scroll she was levitating in front of her, “Teleportation isn’t hard for short distances, however how longer the distance, how more difficult it gets. It needs more focus and precision to attempt such a thing.”

Spike decided to stop trying to cheer her up, there was no use. He actually didn’t really knew why Twilight so desperately wanted to do this. But she had her reasons for it, he was sure of it.

From Canterlot to Ponyville, it was the perfect trajectory to try. No to far, and not to close. Now she just needed to focus. Everything was triple checked: Spike was standing far enough away from her so she didn’t accidentally teleport him with her, her friends were waiting for her at Applejack’s farm –there was a nice pasture there she could aim for- and she was prepared. Nothing could go wrong now, and then she could now finally know if she was really proficient in every kind of magic. Yes, she could teleport short distances fine, but long distance teleportation was one of the things nopony was capable of, except Princess Celestia and Princess Luna of course.

Twilight closed her eyes, focusing her magic as she pictured her target, the pasture behind Applejack’s barn. As her horn began to shine a bright purple, she could feel the grass of the pasture below her feet - despite she was standing on a rock in one of the gardens of Canterlot Castle. She could smell apples, she could hear the wind blow through the apple trees, moving the grass slightly as it danced in front of her. Spike could see the sweat beadles rolling of her forehead, as she was focusing her magic. And suddenly, Twilight released her magic causing her to vanish. Spike closed his eyes to shield them from the bright purple light, when he opened them again Twilight was gone.

“She did it… she did it,” Spike yelled out to no one in particular. He quickly ran to the barracks, where Princess Celestia had provided him with a chariot to Ponyville. He ran up and jumped on the chariot, surprising the two Pegasi guards in front of it, and they quickly took off to Ponyville. Spike was so thrilled that Twilight had done it, that he had to stop himself from yelling at the guards to hurry up. But there was no need for that, as Twilight would already be back at the library by the time he got there. He still couldn’t believe that she did it! But little did Spike know, as the chariot soared through the darkening sky, that Twilight had done much more than just teleport…

***
“… and in waking, I’m alone.”
***

Author's Note: Did Twilight mess up her teleportation? Oh, who knows ... oh, yes of course, I know. Well, you guys just have to find that out in the next chapter...

Some random trivia about this chapter:

*Original idea for Chapter 1 made into three separate chapters.
*During writing the official soundtrack for Bioshock 2 was used. To be more specific: Sounds from the Lighthouse; name of the song used: 'Pairbond'.
*Three bathroom breaks were taking during the writing part of this chapter, another one during the posting part.
*Approximately 1 hour to write it. 2 additional hours were needed for the short rewrite, splicing Chapter 1 into three separate chapters, editing and coming up with the name for this chapter.
*You receive the right to ask for a spoiler for Chapter 2 when you read all of this.

Comments

[TheMightyT]

TheMightyT here. I'm hoping you'll enjoy the story, if not; well, all criticism is highly appreciated.

If you have any questions, ask them here in the comments or PM me.

Also, tell me if you want me to continue this ... .

TheMightyT Out.

[Superpony]

FIRST!!! jk but the story looks promising.

[jmlop0]

Ok Spoiler?And nice job!

[Samuel Eyre]

Hmm. It intrigues me, I will keep track of this story.

[Grankuwaga]

I take it his Daughter is dead or will she also show up later on?

[The Producer]

The funny thing was that I automatically popped in sounds of the lighthouse and blasted pairbonds.

[MagneticMind]

Just curious - do you have any specific Plasmid powers for Subject Delta to have?

[Niklashg]

Just some things i noticed in the story that looks weird.
"Augustus’ dead was necessary in many ways, but he had hoped he didn’t had to kill the man who had helped him along his journey. But he would not get Augustus’ dead be in vain."

first "Augustus’ >death< was necessary in many ways, but he had hoped he didn't >have< to kill the man who had helped him along his journey. but he would not >let< Augustus’ >death< be in vain."

"Like Augustus one said" once said. "Eleanor just needed more time, time he would be making." This is just me but i think you should remove that last part and just have "Eleanor just needed more time."

"The words of Eleanor’s mother resonated" Write Sofia Lamb insted its beter. "Dead was standing out front, waiting for him." Death not dead. "His body was given up" >Giving up< His body is about to stop it hasent stoped yet.

puhh i will return and look through the other half later. but i like the idea. Just try to get a prereader for future shapters.

[Distrance]

Solid story bro.

I feel for you on the whole multiple languages of fan-fictions your writing. Going from one language to another while still being descriptive is hard.

[Stofen]

Awesome, and to think I just beat Bioshock 2 a couple weeks ago. And I also second the motion for what plasmids and tonics this Delta has.

[KyleAJ]

Good structure, slight use of cliches though ("Twilight messes up a spell", used all too often although I can't be sure yet), some mistakes, for that I would suggest getting a pre-reader to catch things that you might miss or fix grammar mistakes seeing as your first language isn't English. Keep up the good work!

[virotox]

good story. personaly i'm very forgiving in terms of grammer. your mistakes mainly consisted of mixing up past/present tense so it was fairly understandable.
there was only one bit that baffled me.
"Dead was standing out front, waiting for him" not quite sure what this bit was supposed to mean

[Petrichor]

See? I told you your story was awesome! I'm so proud to have you as my editor!

[Vonaumock]

It would be interesting if he could use the research camera on the ponies. He could get teleportation from twilight a solar ray/blast ability from celestial and 4th wall break from pinkie.

[TheMightyT]

Wow, I go get some shuteye, and suddenly 80 notifications.
It seems you guys are loving this story, so expect Chapter 2 popping up in a couple of hours.

And now it's time to answer some questions!

259559 259588 259616 *Well, thank you! Expect a spoiler at the end of this post!

259637 *I take it his Daughter is dead or will she also show up later on? That is one hell of a question. Let's just say ... you'll see that in a future chapter.

259644 *Yeah, I love that soundtrack too. Makes me want to write even more, and it's a good way to get in the 'writer'-mood.

259651 259969 260900 *Just curious - do you have any specific Plasmid powers for Subject Delta to have? Eh, I was thinking about that. And I'm not completely sure I can tell the plasmids I maybe will use, because that will surely change ... . I can confirm that he only has one weapon though, his drill; but for plasmids? I will give you a possible list, but it will surely change. Possible Gene Tonics: Drill Lurker, Drill Power (1&2), Fountain of Youth, Keen observer (1&2), Sports Boost, and maybe something like Medical Expert/Handman (with other use than in the game) or Elemental Storm (with an other use than in the game). Possible Plasmids: Decoy, Electro Bolt, Incinerate, Telekinesis.(Cyclone Trap, just to get Pinkie Pie away from Subject Delta.) But just remember this, Subject Delta is not in Rapture anymore. He has spend all his EVE in that last battle, so ... don't expect him killing stuff too frequently with Plasmids. He is in a world with strange rules, and some of his Plasmids & Gene Tonics will have different effects. And if I decide, being the Author, that Incinerate becomes Electro Bolt than I'll just direct you to the "Alternate Universe"-tag. Not that I'm going to do something like that, but just a warning that things are going to be different than in BioShock 2. And to answer another question: Yes, he still has his Research Camera -it's a part of his helmet- and possible his Hack Tool -But it's useless in Equestria-. And maybe I'll write a troll chapter with a '4th wall breaking' Gene Tonic.

259724 260427 260527 *Going to correct those mistakes. Even after reading it 3 times, it still has mistakes. It's the burden of any author, the curse of not being able to spot mistakes in a story you write yourself. Also, my use of 'Dead' is indeed not right. It should be 'Death' in those sentences, I'm going to correct that in a bit. Yeah, for the cliché way ... I had some other ideas, but I sticked with that one. It's was kinda necessary to my Chapter 2, so ... . Yes, I know that 'Twilight messes up a spell' is used frequently, but this program I have on my computer (Plot-hole thingamajig.exe) told me it was better to use a cliché than just magically bringing Subject Delta to Equestria. Maybe I'll release a chapter in the future with a different way of bringing Subject Delta to Equestria. Who knows? I will take that advice, searching for a proofreader as I write this.

259751 *I feel for you on the whole multiple languages of fan-fictions your writing. Going from one language to another while still being descriptive is hard. Yeah, I feel your pain too, brother. *Brohoof*

260586 *Thank you, friend, thank you. Everyone, read his story, it's quite good. And I'm a proofreader, so I know it's good.
Question: Do you have some time left to be a proofreader?

Okay, that was a lot of writing. 23 likes and only 1 dislike, I can not express my emotions through writing ... have an emoticon!

And I didn't forget that spoiler I promised! Enjoy! *SPOILER ALERT*

***
“For every choice, there is an echo. Which each act, we change the world. One man chose a city, free of law and God, but others chose corruption and so the city fell. If the world was reborn at your image, would it be paradise … or perdition?”

“The Rapture dream is over, but in waking I am reborn. This world is not ready for me, yet here I am. … but in waking, I’m alone.”
***

And have some more! *SPOILER ALERT*

***
The trees became a blur and he heard another scream and some kind of howling ... Splicers? No, maybe wolves … what were wolves even, and how did he know that? No time, his Daughter is in danger. The trees became more sparsely the closer he came to, what he thought, was the edge of the forest. He saw a rickety bridge over what seemed to be an abyss or something like that. And a castle … a castle? It seemed very old, destroyed by weather and time, but that was where the scream came from. He began slowly crossing the bridge trying not to look down. But a thought crossed his mind, what if the scream wasn’t from Eleanor? Well, it would just be another death Splicer … .
***

Enjoy some random trivia for Chapter 2:

*There was no mention of any pony, dragon, griffin or anything like that through the entire chapter.

That's all folks, thank you so much!

TheMightyT Out.

EDIT: Holy wall of text!

[TheMightyT]

Questions for all the people who read this story:

*Do you guys know any good BioShock related FanFics on this site? If you do, just reply on this post.
*Any group I need to post this story in? Maybe HiE ... .
*Any suggestions? Are you people mad I'll probably go with a 'Good Guy'-Subject Delta? Or do you guys really prefer the 'Kick some ass and chew bubble gum, but I'm all out of gum'-type for Subject Delta? You can still try to change my mind ... .

Yep, that's all. To the 'Writers Cave'! Chapter 2 inbound in +/- 2 hour!

TheMightyT Out.

EDIT: Needs more emoticons. Yep, that feels better.

[Stofen]

261610
Aww, and here I was hoping he'd have the Security bot Plasmid; "Oh you think you can break the 4th wall Pinkie? Well how about summoning flying robots!"

[Magiwarriorx]

So awesome!

[RusselNotSCP]

i approve.

[Ginkyofu13]

Wow, the first chapter was awesome, I don't know what to say, but it's so detailed.

[JarOfHearts]

I don't like to rag on other authors for making errors, seeing as I have made quite a few myself.

but, I'm seeing quite a few mistakes, misspellings improper grammar and you are getting the tenses wrong on occasion.

Have you tried putting this into a word processing document? like Microsoft word or open office. Open office is open source and a free program so you can use that.

I also suggest finding an editor, there are groups here for editors and beta readers, they are here to help you so you should look into it.

All that aside I really like your story, and I'm just at the first chapter. I'm only pestering you about this because this is a great story and I think it could be even better. When the mistakes are jarring enough to break the flow of the story, everyone has a problem. Hope this helps.

[Harry36gh]

261610 wait a minute you are going to have Delta use only his drill and not his stock load of guns and plasmids along with his hacking tool WTF?!

[Harry36gh]

257464 wait a minute you are going to have Delta use only his drill and not his stock load of guns and plasmids along with his hacking tool WTF?!

[Vinyl Nexus Scratch]

Hold up! Plasmids become a genetic fact of you when you get them! One does not simply re-rewrite their biology on the run... Or I skimmed a bit too much and he's out of power in which case sorry

[MoonSparkle The Vampony]

this will probably piss of someone ,but what is bioshock? i looked up on google and im still confused.

[Ragged]

2667359 its a video game and a good one at that

[Cynical Brony]

2667359I will PM you about it.
Okay?

[Seizure Specialist]

Little, technicolor ponies....

Plus a big Daddy.

......

[NonSummerBody]

2667359 Its a video game. stream1.gifsoup.com/view/1024733/big-daddy-o.gif

[Twilight Nightrose]

5226138 He's right. What you did was split the chapters.

[josue]

2667359 look for the trailer on youtube type in the name you'll have your answers young grasshopper