Day 1
WHHHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY? Why did my sister send me to the moon? Hmm. I did try to take over Equestria, but I didn't do anything! Well, I guess I let Nightmare Moon try to take over the world, but I had no part in what SHE was doing. Like, would you blame someone for something that an evil part of their mind did? Gosh, some people nowadays. Does Celestia even know how it feels to be... *sniff sniff* …..FOREVER ALONE?
Blather blather blather blather blath- ZzzZzzZzzz.
Day 2
You know, there is no difference between day and night in space. My friend here, Space Core taught me that. Or he at least pointed it out to me. His ‘friend’ Wheatley came along too, but he's a total moron. Space core at least says funny stuff:
SPAAAAAAAAAAAAAAACE!!!!
So much space, gotta see it all!
Wanna see me?
Look through a telescope.
Ba ba ba ba ba ba ba ba. Space.
Oh my gosh oh my gosh oh my gosh I'm in SPAAACE!!
Go to space.
Wanna go to space?
SPAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAACE!
Day 3
Spaaace. Aaaarrrfggggggg hehhehehehheehhwhehehehheheh spa-heheheheeh *cough cough* Space core is so funny!! Oh sweet Celestia (why am I saying that??) he's going to get annoying. Anyways, life on the moon is boring, so I won't record anything unless it's really important.
Day 18
Space core found a telescope. He let Nightmare Moon take a look through it, but nothings really changed. I mean, it’s only been eighteen days. Oh well.
Day 75
I can't keep this up much longer. Space core is really annoying me. I think I'm starting to go insane. So much space. I wonder how Celly's going. Not really, because it would just be ruling the beautiful land we know as Equestria. I think I can almost see it from here, but Nightmare Moon's eyes are confusing to me, I can only see a little bit past her big eyes. Well, that was my interesting thing for a while.
Day 195
I tried to overthrow my mind again today, but I'm still too weak to gain control. So, due to my failure, I'm going to invent a new section of my diary: Really really bad jokes section! Oh Celestia, this is going to be horrible. Lucky nopony’s EVER going to read this.
#1.
Why did the pony get sent to the moon?
Because she tried to defy her sister.
Worst joke ever. The element of laughter is disappointed in me. I can feel it.
I am disappointed in you, young padawan.
O_O ← My expression.
Year 20
Double Decadely updates from now on. CBS.
Space core has gone now... Wanted to explore space or something. He might of said that a million times already, I don't know. At least Space Core left me a present. The telescope. But he left about fifteen years ago. Moron Core (Wheatley) left about five years ago, looking all around the moon for a por.. port... portal thing. Said something about it taking him back to earth.
Anyway, I had a look through the telescope yesterday. Other cities (in Equestria) are popping up all over the place. Equestria’s going to be so different when I get home. Hopefully Discord hasn’t permanently made cotton candy clouds that rain chocolate milk. I never liked cotton candy.
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AN: Short chapters, I know. hopefully I will get longer chapters soon.
Thanks everyone who's Liked, Tracked and Favourited :)
CBS: Can't Be Stuffed.
I can't believe people have actually liked it!
First Chapter: I dislike the dialogue you've given nightmare moon. The way you made it happen seems rushed to me. But otherwise it alright
Second Chapter: What? No Wheatly dialogue? Your no fun. Well at least I get Space Core.
Overall I'd say it's pretty good. Kind of funny in some parts.
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1. Yeah, but it was at the time when Nightmare Moon first talked to Luna. But what would you change it to? (BTW I've changed it)
2. Umm.. Sorry! There might be some in 3rd Chapter. But does this mean the rest of the chapter is good?
Really? Thanks. You don't know how much this means to me! I don't think it deserves the comedy tag.
3rd Chapter probably up tonight.
Fics don't need to have a comedy tag to be funny. If you don't intend on making it funny the rest of the fic then I'd say take it away. And yes the rest of the chapter was good.
255419 Well, I'm trying to make it a bit funny..
Hey Purple, if you need some help feel free to ask me, I'll try my best to assist you, just send me a PM. Also, if you need a pre-reader I can help with that. I got some experience in both departments and would be glad to help you with either if you'd like.
Anyways, on topic: I'm enjoying this story so far, although the dialogue in the first chapter felt rushed. I can't wait to see where you take this, as it has a lot of potential that you can easily delve into.
255817 I'm writing the 3rd chapter atm, when I finish it (which should be soon, like 15 mins maybe ) Want me to PM it to you? It's also on google docs, PM me if you want to help! Yeah, Prologue was a bit rushed, I've edited it already (to the version you saw) but if you have any ideas for it, PM me! Always happy to receive constructive criticism.
Oh, come on Luna, Wheatley isn't that bad! He could've retold stories... for about ten minutes.
Haha, that is the greatest-worst joke I've ever heard. I can totally imagine Luna using it as a guilt trip on Celestia.