Sorry everyone but people didn't seem to like it so I rewrote it.

1. where did you get the idea that shinning would to something like this? how does that even make sense?!

I'm speaking to the choir here, but my goodness, you need an editor. Not to mention that some things need to be confirmed.....or at the very least, made clear. There is a bit of story here, but it just right now looks like a bunch of ideas just smootched together.

The crustal empire, huh?

...Nope nope nope nope nope.

*shoots off on a rocket*

3975433 Reads Shining armor having sex with two other stallions

What kind of sin against nature is this?

4286809 As much as I enjoy the occasional dark fic here and there, I have to agree.

It's an interesting idea, but the characterization for Shining Armor feels off which makes it harder to get invested in the story. The emotion carried over through the dialogue though.

Spelling could be better but other than that it's interesting to say the most

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Was it Really that bad? Seemed fine to me.

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This was my first attempt at writing a fanfic or chapter lenghth and while I do agree with the major consensus that it isn't the greatest fic I've ever written I do think I did a bit better but like I said this is nowhere near my best work