may need to go back and tweek somethings bigest mistakes writters do when trying to give the MC a tragic backstory is Making him too forgiving and compassionate in the beginning. becuse most of that stuff = bitter, stuborn, antisocial a-hole so make him more punisher
Let me say That it makes me happy that you have continue on writing this story. I do like the direction the story is going and hope to see more of it soon.
It seems that the ponys have a bad manticores Infestation, or is it that Nyx is by the Everfree Forest. Is there a bad luck charm on her? Running in to one or two can happen but running in to ten? It look like a set up to remove Onyx out of the pitcher.
may need to go back and tweek somethings bigest mistakes writters do when trying to give the MC a tragic backstory is Making him too forgiving and compassionate in the beginning. becuse most of that stuff = bitter, stuborn, antisocial a-hole so make him more punisher
PS the way he was at the start was great but when he came here he changed overnight so fix that
Love it, and can't wait for more!
Let me say That it makes me happy that you have continue on writing this story. I do like the direction the story is going and hope to see more of it soon.
It seems that the ponys have a bad manticores Infestation, or is it that Nyx is by the Everfree Forest. Is there a bad luck charm on her? Running in to one or two can happen but running in to ten? It look like a set up to remove Onyx out of the pitcher.
Dragonfox
this just became 20% cooler .... now all we need is some BAD ASS BATTLE MUSIC trolololololol
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I agree whole heartedly.Bad Ass Battle music should be included in the next chapter.
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It shall be done!!!
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YES!!!!!!! HAPPY DANCE!!!!
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