At First Memory
Luna was tired this morning. The stars had been a bit much, but it had to be done on a clear night. Celestia had tried to tell her this would happen, but Luna was stubborn for that. Luna came into the room with her sister and her court waiting for her arrival to begin. "This session may begin." Celestia announced to the room before everyone was seated. "Luna, you are late!" Celestia whispered furiously. "I'm tired." Luna snapped, "so lets get on with this."
Luna sat there half listening to the conversation, half sleeping. She dreamed of a world free of politics and moon raising every night. A world were she was as free as her moon. "The meeting has ended. You may leave." Luna rose, only to have Celestia's hoof placed on her shoulder. "Luna." She sat.
Celestia stood in front of her. "You are but a foal, and not powerful enough to rule by my side, but in just a few years you will be the princess of darkness. I need to begin your extensive training soon." Luna was shocked. She knew she would be ruler next to her sister, but so soon?
"Celestia-" "No." Luna sighed. "I need to go to sleep." Luna rose, bowed, and left the room. "I love you Luna." Luna didn't turn, but shouted back, "I love you too."
Luna was almost back at her apartment when a brown pony suddenly stood in front of her. She tried to step around him, but he wouldn't move. "Who are you?" She asked. Only certain ponies could get to her quarters.
"The Doctor."
Luna huffed. "Yeah, and I'm a frog." She smiled at him, a fake smile, before brushing past him.
She caught traces of memories off him. Her talent wasn't perfected, but she could feel strong emotions. She gasped. His memories were so heart wrenching that she collapsed in a heap on the floor. "You."
He looked down at her, shocked. "Doctor Who?" She passed out. He quickly picked her up and rushed her to her room. He reached into her memories and found his. They were some of his worst. Gallifrey's sky burning an endless red, the destruction of many different worlds, species, and companions. "Dear Celestia..." He wiped as much of those memories as he could without hurting her. "Sleep now dear..." But in order to wipe her memories of him, he would end up with hers.
He turned to the the blue pony box in the corner. "The Time Lord stands alone." She whispered in her sleep. His breath caught, and he ran into the TARDIS. "No!" He said leaning against the door and falling to the floor. "No."
It was the beginning of Luna's third year of extensive training today, three out of five. She went to her balcony and flew out into the almost-dawn. She used her power to allow the moon to sink out of sight, taking the stars with it. She landed on her balcony again. "Good morning sister." Celestia said. "Are you ready?" Luna nodded, and she and Celestia flew out to the hills.
When the days training was over, Luna wondered the corridors in search of something to do today. All she found was a sowing set, which she took back to her room. She started knitting sub-consciously while she thought about last nights dream. The same companion, a blonde, got sucked through the wall, you could hear her crying on the other side. "Luna. I'm here." That same voice. If only she could place the face. And why did it call her name?
She looked down to see her work.
A blue pony box. Using her magic, she examined it. A perfect replica. But what was a pony box?
"Luna!" Celestia called, while luna rushed to hide her box. "In here sister!" She called back, and stuffed the box under her bedside table.
"Come, dear sister. It is time for us to pick our dresses for the party tonight." Luna followed her sister to the royal dress room, with many dresses on manikins. Her's were purple, or dark blue, while her sister's were pale yellow or like a sunflower and as gold as her crown. They were bright and were perfect for Celestia, and Luna's showed the moon, dark and beautiful.
They chose their dresses and headed to their rooms to change. Luna quickly dressed before grabbing her box and holding it close, and she caught memories off it. Off the real it. "No! No." The brown pony walked to the middle of the huge room. The pony box was huge on the inside! "Did I do enough? What if she remembers? Aahhhh!" He said, angry, and kicked something. She got feelings of intense pain from the box. It was alive!
"Sorry." He said, rubbing the box till the pain was gone. "Never mind. I'll just do something else with my endless life." She gasped, coming out of the memory. Endless?
Another memory began.
"Well, that party crasher has another thing coming!" The brown pony shouted before pulling leavers and pushing buttons. "Allons-y!" He shouted, before a comforting whirring noise drifted her out of the memory.
"Luna! Time to go!" Luna put the box in a draw, locked it, and ran out to her sister in the carriage. She jumped in, re-arranged her small tiara and sat down. "Sister." Luna said, giving her hoof. Celestia put her own hoof on top of it. They smiled, drooped
their hooves, and the carriage was off.
At the party, they waited at the front door, greeting every guest, before entering the party. This wasn't Luna's first, but she didn't know everyone. It was getting close to dusk, so Luna headed for the platform, so everyone at the winter solecist party could see her.
She stopped just before she was visible, and let Celestia lower the sun. Then she stepped forward and stood on hind legs in front of the crowd, head tilted back, horn glowing. The moon rose and everyone clapped and cheered at Luna's first solecist party. She heard cheering outside too, as she dropped back to all fours, and flew over the balcony to the ground. All in a night's work.
Lots more ponies talked to her after that show. She was getting claustrophobic with all these ponies talking to her, so she walked outside when no pony was looking. Just as she went outside, Celestia put her hoof on Luna's shoulder. "We shall depart soon sister, for you to get your rest." Luna turned to look at her sister, nodded, and Celestia left.
Luna began wondering the gardens, her guards just out of sight. She stopped and lay down on a grassy patch, in the middle of very tall flowers. Only if you came into the small area, would you see her.
Just as her eyes began growing heavy, the whirring noise began again, getting slightly louder as a pony box appeared. Luna jumped back, suddenly filed with anger at the noise and who she suddenly realised it could be. Horn pointed at the door she charged knocking the brown pony to the ground, and causing the door to close silently. Luna put her horn to the pony's throat, her hooves on either side of his body.
"What!?" He exclaimed. "WHAT?" A smile touched Luna's lips for a second. "WHAT!?" Then he tried to push her off, and those dreams hit her, except as memories. She fell to the ground next to him, eyes closed tight, the pain of the memories too much, making her curl into a ball to protect herself from the monster before her.
"The Time Lord stands alone." She whispered. She heard his breathing quicken, and he fell to his knees. "I remember you, Doctor." Luna said, just before a powerful head ache made her gasp for breath.
"The memories. They're too much for you." Luna shook her head, causing more pain inside her skull. "I will win this internal battle, Doctor. You alone cannot fix everything." He helped her up, letting her lean on him, withholding his memories.
"Outside. Now." She said between gulps of air. He opened the door and took her outside, and laid her on the grass. She kept her eyes closed. "Leave, let me call my guards." Luna whispered. He shook his head. "I will not leave your side till your ordeal is done." She sighed inwardly. "Then they shall arrest you." Luna hissed quietly. "Last chance Doctor."
He sighed and stood. "I will see you soon, my dear." He walked to his TARDIS before stopping at the door. He didn't turn, but he said in a whisper as he opened his door to step in, "I stand alone, I walk with you." And he, and his box disappeared.
"Guards!" Luna said in her most commanding voice, standing on shaky legs, before looking tall and proud as her guards appeared. "Tell my sister I am ready to depart." They nodded before teleporting to her sister. Luna walked to the edge of the flowers, teleported to the other side with the last of her strength and started walking back to the party.
Celestia appeared next to her as the building came into view. "Sister. Take me home." Luna said, before falling into her sisters hooves. She was still awake, but all she could see was the Doctor's life. Endless life.
"Luna?!" Celestia cried. Luna had just been walking, strong and proud, until she noticed Celestia's presence, and she passed out in her hooves. Now their guards came, and they tried to take Luna to the carriage, but Celestia put her on her back instead.
When in the carriage, she put Luna's head in her lap. That's when her eyes began glowing behind their lids. "Luna!" She called, terriably afraid. "Faster!" She called to the stallions, and their journey was quickened.
Then Luna's whole head began glowing. "The battle is won." She said in a voice that wasn't hers. "Doctor." Celestia growled. Luna's whole body was glowing now, and Celestia let go of her, and in a flash of white light, she was Luna again.
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2676358
Oh I hate spell check.
2676358
By the way where is the second quote?
2676398
The second is just an emphasis.
But don't worry, got some other quotes to keep it fresh.
There's no need to capitalize those words. Emphasis can be done with italics. Being here, I take the chance to say that things like 'she whispered' are the same sentence as the direct speech itself, therefore not capitalized and are preceded by a comma and not a period. And space. Spaaaaace.
I see what you haven't done there!
Night's.
Terribly misspelled, haha.
But all of this is minor. What you really, and I mean really gotta change is this:
It's called Gallifrey!
So that's my top
tennine. The story was kinda rushed over all. When the Doctor was like WHAT, I felt exactly the same way. Couldn't see a proper reason for Luna to do just that. Liked the idea that Celestia is teaching Luna. Haven't seen that in a while. Also that Luna's referred to as the Princess of the Darkness instead of Princess of the Night (totally different thing) is interesting. I see potential here. Potential that needs more time to work out the ideas into finer shapes. Write on!Well, it was a thing...
(Honestly, I'm feeling a little 
now...)
Like was said above, spelling and grammar could do for an overhaul. That seems to be a thing with everyone's first story. (Until I got an editor... Yeah. Even I found my writing unreadable.) Also, a bit of lengthening too. It is not a bad thing to take a few extra lines or a paragraph of explanation if there is a complex idea that you are trying to get across. One last (minor) thing, the show established that Luna (and assumedly Celestia) used a variation of Shakespearean English in ye olden times. If you want to drive yourself (and your editor) insane, you can try using it for their speech.
On the other hand, Luna fics, Doctor Whooves fics and Luna x Doctor fics were what got me into MLP fics. Good to see this old trend back again (not that I have really been paying attention to things...)
Keep me informed. I'm happy to offer any tips I have picked up
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Sit down, shut up and enjoy Dr who and luna. Y u nit pick a very good concept.
Sorry about that guys, I'll sort it out. Like I said before this is a basic copy and paste with almost 0% editing.
I am stupid. 
Anyway, I'll get to work on this chapter and just so you know, I questioned on wether or not I should call Luna the Princess of Darkness or the Princess of the Night. I think you will find it a little clearly later on why her title changes.
Ok, if I missed anything out, just say. I'll get on editing the next chapters too. Thanks for all the help everypony!
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Ummm.
Hello! I read your story for my Random Fanfiction of the Week on Youtube. I hope you enjoy! ^^
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/108232/1/luna-reborn/at-first-memory
If you'd really really like me to take it down... just ask ok!