two raritys? How can that be?

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I dont know? But ill find a way to explain also things are going turn sad this not gonna be some cliche story were human turned anthro pony where everything goes their way. Not. Gonna. Happen.

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damn. Wait individual I's or all of the words that begin with I?

Ok I am way passed the point of no return in terms of confusion. can someone PLEASE tell me what the F just happened !?

hmmm.... I like this.
Why did they not start screaming changling.
Also I did not get that they were anthro at first.

Keep up the great work.

lol

I'm interested in this so far. But you might want to try and get an editor. Couple of mstakes here and there which detract from the story. I think there's a group or two just for such a thing.

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Yeah damn I have an editor for my other story who I've become - Nightmare Moon maybe he can do this one as well.

Well, the picture by itself makes be interested. Lol Curious who made it.

The Fabulousity has been DOUBLED!

It Rarity long lost twin. This story sounds interesting. Now I'm favoring both story's.

2531353 It's magic don't need to explain s*it.

Ok, this is VERY important: do they have hooves or feet on their legs?
Anthro with human legs is an abomination in my book, and for now everything indicates that this is the case (or it's just misread).

BTW. Since you are the author of that one as well, than could you answer the same question for your other story?

PS. Les shipping?

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The story description states that they have feet. In the other story they have hooves.

2 RARITY'S? Now there is twice the most beautiful mare in Equestria? I can't say anything about this, so I'll let Luna say it.
HUZZAH! THE FUN HAS BEEN DOUBLED!
and that was Luna

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All the individual ones.

2532530 basically any I that is used to specify 'me' (whoever is saying it) should be capitalized (I, I'm, etc..)

This was alright, but you need to edit this. Grammar and word placements are all over the place and EHY SO FEW COMMAS!