Here it is, the first champion spotlight for the story! Written for those who wanna play their favorite ponies champion counter part, see who is based on who or just for those who are bored and want a quick laugh, here they are! This chapters focus is on the royalty of Equestria!
Name: Celestia
Based on: Leona
Brief summary: Celestia was one of the first to enter the order, along with her sister and Discord. A tough contender, she uses the power of the sun to attack her enemies. She namely depends on her own natural durability as an alicorn and her royal armor to keep her safe from even the strongest foes. For the safety of all that fight in the Order she and her sister wear inhibitors to stop them from accidentally vaporizing someone permanently.
Name: Luna
Based on: Diana
Brief summary: Having joined with her sister, Luna was one of the first to enter the order as well. As opposed to her sister she wears very little armor and instead attacks with the full (suppressed) might of the moon. In terms of destructive capabilities she is one of the most damaging and painful champions to face. Over time many a champion has fallen to her lunar strikes.
Name: Cadence
Based on: Soraka
Brief summary: A recent joiner to the order. Cadence entered soon after her husband, Shining Armor, signed up. Lacking any real offensive capabilities she instead uses her magic of love and kindness to demoralize her enemies and increase the morale of her allies, as well as relieve them of their pain and suffering. She also tends to be the first one on the scene whenever out of arena horse play gets out of hand. She has managed to save many lives with her new healing spells.
Name: Shining Armor
Based on: Garen
Brief summary: No one was surprised to see the prince take up a sword and enter the order. What did surprise them was how skilled he was in wielding his magic crystal blade. Many a champion has fallen to his blade as he used his trade mark skill of calling out to the Crystal Empire followed by whirling death. Unsurprisingly, he is a crowd favorite back home.
Name: Blueblood
Based on: JarvanIV
Brief summary: NO ONE expected to see this prince join the order. When he initially offered he was practically laughed out of the building, even by his aunts(well great great great etc so and so removed aunts but still aunts technically!). Using his resources he slowly amassed a magical armory of weapons and other items with which to fight and prove his worth. Despite many initial set backs even the princesses cannot deny that his participation in the order has done wonders for his behavior.
Name: Nightmawe Woon
Based on: Annie
Brief summary: With the sheer number of alicorns representing the pony kingdoms the other countries began to worry they would eventually be overwhelmed by their might, especially if the order was just a means by which they could stall. Nightmawe Woon was an attempt to counter act this power. A failed attempt.
Whoever created her is unknown, what is known is that she stormed the palace and demanded that Celestia and Luna surrender to her the kingdom for eternal night. Considering she was only a filly instead she got a glomp, a d'awwww, then a swift spanking for trying to take over the kingdom. It was truly a crushing defeat and as she laid in bed after supper with no dessert, she plotted.
A few days later she demanded entry into the order and was promptly kicked out. The next day she demolished the order headquarters by dropping and ursine minor in the middle of it. After that Discord found the entire thing so hilarious he let her right in. The jerk.
Despite her young(or ancient depending on how you look at it) age she is still a very powerful mage, able to contend with the strongest of them. Unfortunately for her she is one of the only champions with a bed time so still has to miss most the late night battles.
There, added a little bonus section I managed to finish.
2510310 Thankies ^^ Sadly I never played the original dota but I'm still trying to keep to the spirit... Well the same spirit that lol keeps to it.
2510286 Aye. Originally I was going to have Twilight be the main character but in the end I decided to just try for something new. I had a story in mind for Rift ages ago but sadly I never got around to writing it. In the end I realized she would be perfect for such a world, considering her special talent. Also, about the extra work, I try to always be susceptible to feedback so any thoughts I would love to hear.
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If you have Skype, add me. Kalreas is the name.
If you play League of Legends any, add me there too. Don't play that as much nowadays with school into my daily mix, but I still enjoy a game from time to time. Name on there is Kalreas as well.
As for feedback, I could always tell you either in a PM at a later time, because I'm going to bed after I send this, or through Skype.
Enjoy yourself until then! - Sorin "Kalreas" Kanire
2510638 Hee hee. Actually I found him to be a bit funny. Any views of the characters do not necessarily represent the views of the author because I am a slave to the plot convenience. >.>
Im loving the story so far!
Any fanfic of league is awesome anyways
but this is very noice indeed!!
I found only minor grammar and spelling mistakes which will need some tweaking
and i'd like for you to explore the thought process of the characters or be more informative of the befolding events
Hope I'll appear soon
2511548 Thanks ^^ I was actually really excited when I was writing this and it just flowed onto the paper. I do plan on doing a bit more exploration in the next chapter but this was really mostly a intro. Ironically I've been getting a lot of feedback but a lot of down votes so I can't tell if this story is good or bad yet >.> Any thing you notice wrong feel free to tell me ^^ I want to improve all my stories as much as I can but sadly I tend to miss a lot of my faults so I depend on my dear readers to help me out when they feel they can.
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Well one of the issues is that you have many many run-on sentences
for example:
You'd want to not strain too much of a sentence's length cause it could lead to run-on sentences. That means you have more than one idea crammed into one sentence without adding a punctuation mark in between. You also have an issue with punctuating adjectives and adverbs etc. So the correct version would be:
2514800 Thanks ^^ I'll try to go over it again after I get home from work. Thanks for the feed back.
2521668 ... Oh. Well, ummm, in that case.... *feels better* I'd never gotten such a downvote ratio before, well except that one story that was just bad, and was starting to really worry >.> I dun like writing stories that suck D: