Hiya, lovely peeps!

I have two things I recently posted that need feedback with the following: pacing, characters, narrative style.

March 18, 2021:
What a Strange new World, Chapter Three

EWhat a Strange New World

• Equestria Girls
• Slice of Life

I jumped through the portal to escape Celestiaʼs wrath. Now, I find myself in this strange, new world. But thatʼs okay, Iʼll figure it out, like I always do.

• Other
• Sunset Shimmer

Uz Naimat · 7.6k words  ·  23  3 · 751 views

March 20, 2021
Pinkie’s Pies

EPinkie’s Pies

• Equestria Girls
• Slice of Life

Pinkie has decided that it’s time to embark on a new adventure: write a book! It’s going to be wonderful and interesting, but most importantly, it’ll make people smile.

• Pinkie Pie (EqG)
• Sci-Twi
• Main 7 (EqG)

Uz Naimat · 5.7k words  ·  30  3 · 652 views