Review
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TSpring Love

• MLP: FiM
• Romance
• Comedy
• Slice of Life

Rainbow Dash has a crush on Soarin, she isn't willing to admit her feelings.

• Rainbow Dash
• Soarin

Nailah · 7.6k words  ·  56  9 · 2.9k views

Plot Analysis: Spring Love features a simple and straightforward plot. It highlights a growing romantic attachment to Soarin from Rainbow Dash. The progression of events is reactionary, with one leading directly to the next. It does not take leaps and bounds beyond traditional romance stories, but neither does it make any missteps. For a short romantic comedy, that is entirely acceptable as the real feature of the genre is in its characters. 

Characters: Readers should be prepared to have an open and fluid mind when it comes to Rainbow Dash’s characteristics. Her reactions to sudden romantic urges are typical ones seen throughout other media, such as trying to ignore her initial desires or worrying about overdressing for a date.

However, these behaviours are not the ones we would ascribe to Rainbow Dash as she is portrayed in the show. As such, do understand that this is an author’s interpretation of Rainbow Dash, one who expresses a stronger feminine side.

Dialogue: The dialogue can feel a little stiff or unexpressive in some scenes. The register remains consistently formal, as the story attempts to have more intimate interactions between Soarin and Rainbow Dash. So while it is well written, the story falls short of allowing the dialogue to stretch and breath naturally. I should also take this time to note that there are many noticeable errors in punctuation with the dialogue, such as the absence of quotation marks at the end of some lines of dialogue.

Overall: Without many hooks or twists in the story and characters, the major selling point for this story is the relationship it supports. Unfortunately, there are punctuation errors in and out of the dialogue that are just noticeable enough to negatively affect the reading experience. It’s hard to lose yourself in the writing when commas or quotation marks do not appear where they ought to be. This earns a 7 out of 10 for a mostly well-executed story that maintains a simple and linear plot and doesn’t try to be anything more than a charming time.

For the Author: Improving the wording of dialogue and correcting punctuation errors will greatly improve this story. 

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For the Reader: If you ship Soarin x Rainbow, this story will probably rate a little higher than it did for me. If you hate the ship, this story has nothing to offer you. It knows its audience.

<For archive purposes: 7/10>