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Rainbow Dash has a crush on Soarin; she isn't willing to admit her feelings.

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Just one flaw, English skills. Now, I'm talking about punctuation, spelling, etc. You've done good on that most of all but I found a few parts that needed some extra rereading and editing. I advise for you to scan your chapter/part after writing it or even better; get an editor or a reviewer before you release the chapter.

Besides that, you did well on everything else: the beginning, description, dialogue and the characters. Well done, keep up the good work.:twilightsmile:

-Mr User

OMG!!!
I can't wait to see more!!!

So she finally lets somebody else into the loop... It was only a matter of time.

I love this chapter and this story so much. Amazing job on this my friend, amazingly and lovely job.

“Hmm I think I'll have the taco salad, yeah that sounds delicious.” replied Rainbow Dash, steak was good and nice and juicy.

Hay steak....right?:pinkiesad2::pinkiesad2::fluttercry::pinkiecrazy::fluttercry::pinkiesad2::pinkiesad2:

Soarin couldn't help but to be a bit brave and sit Rainbow Dash onto his lap as he held around her and Rainbow Dash faced him so she could kiss him more as she couldn't even believe she was going out with her crush, and she knew things couldn't be better than right now in this moment with him.

N'aawwwww:rainbowkiss:

“Oh dear me lookie here. I'd better close the curtains.” smiled Pinkie Pie from outside. “That's all folks!”

That ending is amazing! :rainbowlaugh:

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Wow I would say this is already interesting start of a story and it looks like Rainbow Dash having some conflicted feelings when Soarin complimented her she's even having dreams about him and she doesn't know how to deal with it so it looks like she's going to ask Rarity for some advice this should be very interesting

Well then despite how cute it was it did not go as according to Rainbow Dash's plan she really did everything she could not to get carried away about her feelings towards soarin but then her emotion got the best of her and she really want to tell him but then it rained but it's not too late to say something but let's see how this will go

Oh wow that was pretty fast but yet I really like it so it looks like rainbow was about to say something to him but instead she just kiss him and apparently he didn't pull away but it looks like he wanted to invite her for supper which I guess it is a date for her but the problem is she does not have anything to wear because she doesn't normally wear dresses so she asked Rarity for a New Dress which Rarity wanted to know why and rainbow admitted to her that she's going out with Soarin and it looks like Rarity is on the move when it comes to romance so I wonder how that will work

“Oh dear me lookie here. I'd better close the curtains.” smiled Pinkie Pie from outside. “That's all folks!”

I got to say this was a pretty good story a little short but very good so it looks like rainbow finally got her dress after a rarity gave her some advice for her but with that she and soarin went out to dinner when they finally got there he actually admitted that he got a crush on Rainbow and how much he cares about her so much which that's pretty nice and even rainbow admitted to Soarin how much she also likes him so much as well and they became official couple and they share the kiss which it is pretty romantic again this is really good keep up the good work

the rain was down pouring rain outside and they didn't have practice for a few days for the next big Wonderbolt performance

Did you mean to say “rain” twice?

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No, I did not mean to use rain twice. I wrote this story back when I didn't nothing about writing. Sorry.

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