TThe Reservation

• MLP: FiM
• Sad
• Slice of Life
• Tragedy

The Conversion War is over, ponies have lost a war caused by their formally beloved leader Celestia. Reservations in the former Equestrian state have been set up, while humans move into the new state of Lincoln.

• Human

Kyuubi325 · 112k words  ·  403  45 · 10k views

Review: The Reservation

Tags: Sad, Slice of Life, Tragedy

Summary: Long description (Critiques and ideas are more than welcome for this story.)  Error.

Summary pt 2: Government and humans… etc…

Review: I have to say this is way better. I do like the idea of this fiction and the flow of it done well. Besides the long description error.  Grammar needs a bit of work… There was a gap in the chapter in scootaloo and Murphy (part1)...  So did this do good?  Yes… Did it live up to its expectation? Yes.  Did I love this? Yes.  But let’s think here it’s also incomplete so I don’t know what changes in the ending… In the long descriptions ideas and critique might change the story then it’s original maybe… not sure…??? If that is pointed out there.

My conclusion…  7/10 it’s pretty good.