50 Years before the events of Fallout Equestria, a monster falls in love with his victim and becomes best of friends with his hunter. Talk of a legendary Raider King brings pariahs from all over the wasteland to the town of Ponyville.
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Wow, I will need to read this story once more. Is he dead, undead, mostly dead. So many plot devices, so many characters, and so much world building to come.
7145676 So many more characters on the too. Savage Song, Cross Fire, Hexerai, Jailbird, Jonna Gold, Traffic, Little Bastard, Duckling, and so many more characters that exist but I also am tentative on names for. All with varying levels of importance. Its a big story, and most of it is mapped out. I laugh when my editor tells me that "Joker's Wild villains come in swarms."
Guess I'll have to finish the reworks on the next section sooner so you can get those answers.
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I think I need to explain the nature of the joke going on with Calypto shooting Tumbleweed. This is a joke that entirely functions on subtext
Neither pointing out a fact nor any type of annoyance is responsible for why Calypto shoots Tumbleweed in this scene. Calypto's true motive in this is one of confusion and curiosity. Let me explain the subtext here. Calypto has jumped straight to shooting Killjoy mid-conversation. Usually this is an excellent tactic. Why wait to listen for an enemy to finish talking? Especially when you know they are a dirty raider! The jump to the preemptive first strike is a tried and true tactic for survival in the wasteland.
But despite landing a shot dead in the center of the pony's face, Killjoy spits the bullet out unfazed. In Calypto's mind that sort of thing is impossible. Killjoy's head should have exploded right then and there. Calypto is trying to understand what is going on here. It certainly wasn't his aim, he knew that.
Tumbleweed then provides the information that it is "Earth pony magic." It is an explanation for the reader, but to Calypto he is still confused because he has certainly shot earth ponies before. Why did it not work now? Earth pony magic is usually so subtle that it often goes without notice, and the idea of personalized magic for earth ponies doesn't register for Calypto. Calypto is questioning whether his guns are still working properly.
He needs to know. His guns are his primary means of defense. It sets up the irresponsible split-second idea for an experiment. Do my bullets still work on earth ponies? If they don't work on Killjoy because he is an earth pony, do they not work on other earth ponies?
Unfortunately for Tumbleweed, he is the closest earth pony.
This is also not true. Calypto has yet to shoot tumbleweed. Scapegrace is the only one up to this point who has shot Tumbleweed. Calypto almost shot Tumbleweed when he snuck up behind him, but Tumbleweed avoided having his head blasted off by passing the gun over his shoulder.
Calypto shooting Tumbleweed is also not as huge of a problem. Calypto has excellent aim, and he can figure out how to land and nonlethal shot at close range. Tumbleweed also manifests one of the few "gamey" aspect of the story with the "Fire of Friendship" bonus perk added at the end of "New Friend Gambit". There is a narrative reason for things like this, but I don't want to give too much away at this point.
This bullet provides more than just drive in the Killjoy fight for Tumbleweed. This is the symbolic manifestation of the strange friendship that Tumbleweed and Calypto share. It is one where they do not entirely agree with each other, and they even get in each others way. To Calypto, Tumbleweed exists outside of his sphere of Justice. Tumbleweed is a scoundrel at heart, but he also shares a certain mindset with Calypto about wasteland life that is rare. For Calypto, he isn't unjustly shooting somepony else. In a way, he is shooting himself, so it's okay.
For Tumbleweed, it is more than just an annoying drive that he gets in the middle of the fight with Killjoy. It is the presence of an ally when he is in the pits. When he is about to give up, Calypto pulls him up refusing to let him die. Calypto is the entire reason for Tumbleweed being in the town at this point. While him getting shot by Calypto is a horrible thing, it saves his life. This characterizes the dynamic shared between the two characters. Their friendship is one that relishes in being terrible people to each other, but in ways that make each other grow and push each other forward. Their friendship is the fire of friendship, straight under each others asses.
As MLP has grown, the nature of the friendship of the Mane 6 has changed alot over time. There is this idea that friendship is soft, enabling niceness and agreeableness. Laughter, Generosity, Kindness, Honesty, and Loyalty certainly shine through, but we have lost sight of the elusive element of Magic. Lauren Faust described the element of Magic as that "x-factor" that you just can't explain. It is a chemistry between friends that doesn't fall into the other five categories. The friendship of Calypto and Tumbleweed is almost entirely x-factor. They that when the 5 elements are present, the 6th will appear naturally, but in this case, it is the other way around. Magic is the spark that brings the other elements to their relationship. Chapter one, that X-factor lead to laughter between them, and set the foundation for Loyalty. We may get to see honesty, generosity and other elements come out of them, but the strongest element is the similar irresponsible mindset they share and the mutual games of pissing each other off.
This moment helps display a nuance in their character relationship that shows their 3-dimensional sides.
Now that is out of the way, lets talk about other stuff.
Tumbleweed has had a number of instance of showing good judgement, character, and fighting knowledge up to this point, but this was certainly the first martially intensive fight of the story. It helps that it is a melee fight, meaning that Tumbleweed doesn't have to do most of his fighting on the run. While I would love to write fights like this for every fight, I would burn myself out too quickly, and it would mess with pacing. When there are important fights, they will certainly get more martial attention. This was a fun fight to write, and I hope to be able to make more like this.
The Killjoy fight was definitely supposed to be the center piece of the chapter. I have some regrets about the implementation of the alicorn scene. I've grown a lot as a writer since I have put the scene together, and it isn't as strong. Another thing is that we are starting to get into the set up for the main over arching story for the entirety of joker's wild, and had I known as much of the story I have planned as I do now, I might have introduced the elements at play differently. From this point on, the story is getting a whole lot more defined.
I like playing around with words, and sometimes that means it breaks flow a bit. I like subtext and sometimes it doesn't always pull through. I agree with the statement that some of the word play isn't the best in this chapter.
I am really happy you found this chapter exciting. Hopefully I can make it so every chapter is exciting or interesting as well.
Well, that escalated quickly.
you know what to do. If oyu dont read it aloud. carefully
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My chapter is about fourteen thousand words long. That response you just wrote was twelve words, and you don't even follow your own advice. Thanks for pointing it out, but come on, man. I'm sure there are way more errors in there. It's a big story and grammatical perfection isn't a huge priority.
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My bad. It was meant as a joke. Pardon me for trying to fix an (admittedly) minor issue. Sorry if i offended you.