50 Years before the events of Fallout Equestria, a monster falls in love with his victim and becomes best of friends with his hunter. Talk of a legendary Raider King brings pariahs from all over the wasteland to the town of Ponyville.
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It's all converging here. This building that messes with your head.
Bit of an issue when pharaoh is described. It says he's covered in silks with a purple mantle
Only a few paragraphs later, it again says he's covered in silks and goes into more detail about his other garments. Repeating the same detail again, especially in such short time, really hampers the flow. If it were me, I'd either nix the first description or find a way to merge the two.