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Thought Prism


Founder of Thought Prism Games. Check out my work at thoughtprismgames.com!

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  • Thursday
    Another Rising Flames Progress Update

    It'll probably be another two weeks before chapter four is ready, give or take. It's needed far more editing than any chapter so far, and also more than any chapter to follow, most likely. Actually, this single chapter has probably undergone more revisions than any other piece of fiction I've ever worked on. I went overboard on the original version due to my desire for drama, which led to drama

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  • 10 weeks
    Rising Flames Progress Update

    Just letting everybody know, it's going to be a bit longer before Chapter Three drops. In addition to refining our editing process to be more collaborative (I was letting my mindset from my game development work bleed into here, when my priorities with Rising Flames are very different), Spell Check and applezombi pointed out a bunch of issues with my outline that I've been diligently

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  • 14 weeks
    My new company: Thought Prism Games!

    I’ve got an exciting announcement today! Some of you might have been wondering what I’ve been up to outside the fanfic front, and now I’m ready to share at last. I am proud to announce and launch my new card game company: Though Prism Games! I have two fresh releases: Carddrop, a nifty little dexterity game to enjoy with regular playing cards, and Veebar, a fun two-player experience for all ages.

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  • 21 weeks
    Rising Flames Release Date!

    1/1/2024

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  • 27 weeks
    Free Giveaway of my book!

    Since it’s been over a year since release, and I don’t think anybody else is going to buy it at this point, I’ve decided to release my original fantasy novel from last year for free! You can read it right in dropbox here, or download the file. It’s an EPUB, so it’ll

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May
27th
2022

My quick takes on the Make Your Mark special · 1:07am May 27th, 2022

Spoilers, click after the break only if you've watched or don't care.

So, it, uh, wasn’t that good. The pacing was far too rushed, as they crammed like a half dozen plotlines into 40 minues. Of these, the festival planning didn’t really matter, and slice of life like that could’ve just gone into the Tell Your Tale shorts instead. The dragon didn’t need to be there either, it just got shoehorned in out of nowhere as a needless disruption, likely solely for toy sales. Meanwhile, we just got magic back in the movie, so having the reverse as a main focus here seemed dumb to me. Also, the literal all-consuming voids in reality was a gigantic escalation that came out of nowhere and gave me tonal whiplash. The character writing was also kinda terrible. Hitch came across as too wacky to me when compared to his character from the movie, shirking his responsibilities constantly even when he’s needed. And Posey’s complete turnaround combined with the sudden revelation of ‘oh earth ponies have magic too now’ was super forced.

By far the most interesting conflict was Zipp needing to reconcile her personal desires with her royal duties, but that got resolved super quickly as a footnote. Haven barely objected to Zipp’s choice. This had so much potential, I would have just planted the narrative focus here. The other major bit of missed potential was the evil alicorn at the end. Even with only 30 seconds of screentime her motivations make no sense. If she wanted magic back, why wasn’t she helping the tribes get it back? That would’ve been a cool twist for the main film, actually. She could have come in as this messianic figure promising the return of magic and friendship, and then delivered, but then five minutes later reveal she wanted the magic back so she could steal it all and then does so.

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could have come in as this messianic figure promising the return of magic and friendship, and then delivered, but then five minutes later reveal she wanted the magic back so she could steal it all and then does so.

I'd like to watch that special :rainbowlaugh:

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See, the show writers need to step up their game.

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