Chapter 29 · 5:42pm May 9th, 2022
So... so, so, so, so.
First thing first, I never expected I'd be writing something like this, but then again, I never expected to write a story in the first place.
I have no feasible idea what possessed me to post chapter 29 yesterday other than my need for consistency but I did it.
In whole honesty I hated that chapter, it never felt right, it didn't flow right, and while it does accomplish what I wished to happen (for Patch to foolishly decide to pursue Chrysalis) it did not turn out well. I spent the whole night agonizing over it, couldn't sleep really.
There are plenty of things I should have done to make it work better, but to be perfectly honest, I am writing the whole story as it goes along. I have no plans (other than one singular event that should happen later) and the whole thing is literally being pulled out of thin air, and this is the consequence of it.
I should have done this from the get-go, but I will be removing chapter 29 from the site as soon as I get home and put some time into fixing it and all the other chapters I have already written (I like to write in advance). Maybe even change how things play out, I will see.
Since I have a few extra things on my plate atm it should take some time so there will probably not be a chapter published this week.
I'm honestly not good at writing this kind of stuff, so... that's it, for now. I'll try to do better in the future.
Have a nice day and stay safe in our crazy world.
I thought Patch seemed irrational in that one. I get that he's upset with the pacing of the plan and about being left in the dark, but literally everyone he trusts is telling him the same thing, and he agrees that what he wants to do is a bad idea, but he's going to do it anyway.
Patch has been portrayed as being impatient and impulsive before, but that seems rather extreme.
I had to change up some of my chapters occational as well. Often typos that accidently did change a lot.
Very curriouse how chapter 29 will look later.
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Agreed, unless he has bern drugged or something, he is not making any sence.
I pull things out of the air way too often when I write as well, trying to lead up to a singular planned event, so I get not being particularly satisfied with a chapter. Feel free to redo it until you’re satisfied with it, no one’s in a rush to read it and there’s no rush in writing it. Good things take time, as some people say.
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I think the behavior of the others was the greater problem. There was just no reason to keep him in the dark. They needed him in the loop to be properly prepared, and his reaction to being excluded was merely just as irrational. Stubbornness all around, even though everyone (Patch included) should have seen the frustration discharging itself in a rash mistake from a mile away.
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True, I don't get why he couldn't be part of the planning process for his fight against Nightmare Chrissy.
I don't think that was ever adequately explained.
I was gonna comment on his odd impulsiveness, but felt like it wouldnt really mean much. Thanks for fixing it!
Thanks for your hard work
I thought the chapter was fine writing wise, as a character it did seem foolish and impulsive but I chalked that down to him being young and reckless. Shame to see the chapter go but if you feel the story could benefit from this chapter being reworked or deleted then go ahead! At the end of the day this is your world and you’ve allowed us to partake in it!