Work in progress · 1:44am Feb 12th, 2021
Hey guys just a heads up I'm working on the next chapter for the "The time I was reincarnated as a dragon" story.
While I'm working on I was curious to get your guy's opinion on something. How am I doing?
What I mean is am I doing a good job, or are there things you guys would like to see more off?
This can range from anything like.
Setting and how I describe them.
The usage of the mlp character.
This is by far the story everyone likes and wait for an update. So any feed back would help me so much.
One last thing, if you do enjoy this story and you haven't already I'd really appreciate it if you guys could leave a 👍. It would mean so much to me if I can get this story to 2k likes. I've rarely seen any stories with that many likes and if I could make it that far I could say that I made a real achievement.
I love this story
Seems good. I like it.
You're doing a fantastic job. Keep up the good work!!
It's going to be interesting to see where Johann's story is going to go and how his relationship with the princesses will develop.
you are doing a awesome job righting do keep up the greatness.
I love it, the story is great as is, if anything it would be just a wee bit more chuckleable moments.
I would have enjoyed it if Johann changed his name to signify the start of his new life as a Dragon instead of after Celestia and Luna fixing him and telling him his name he should have chosen to keep Noir as his name because after six months he was less Johann and more Noir. Plus Johann isn't really a Dragons name. Also I'm pretty sure Johann is the the name of the trader in the HTTYD TV series. I also think you should take out the Comedy Tag and replace it with Adventure or Dark because from how I see things those will be much more prominent in the near future.
Other than that I have thoroughly enjoyed this story and cannot wait for the next chapter. I hope he goes back to the Griffin Kingdom soon.
PS. Give the Griffin Kingdom a unique name than just Griffon Kingdom it's unoriginal and boring.
I have an idea for something you could do if you want to make Diamond act up again. Have her do the whole "high and mighty" speech while walking around Johann-as pompous little shits do-and finish it when she's unknowingly standing on his tail, which he'll then use to send her flying through the air like a pseudo catapult, where she then lands in a passing manure cart that AJ was taking away to be disposed.
Anyone else have an idea to add on to this? Or by chance another situation altogether? Let me hear it!... Or I guess, more accurately, see it.
It's a good mix of humor and suspense. A suggestion for some humor I can think of is Spoiled Rich sees Johann, demanding to Twilight that he "be put in his cage and not be around the children". But instead of Twilight explaining, Johann declares his status, yet she doesn't believe him still. Then a pegasus guard from Canterlot arrives and greets Johann as his title.
I don't think Spoiled would be able to recover from talking dirt of a duke.