So what now?

Ok, I finished editing my second story but along the way were a few hindrances that help me be more critical with my writing.

Some of them were understandable and others were infuriating.

Here I left the logs of my editing and some comments of those times.

This is the first story I do in the course of a few years and published as completed but I fear that because English is not my native language, I must have left a mistake during the transcription, I used the Grammarly program to try to mitigate as much as possible but I feel it was not enough.

If you can help me and comment on where I am wrong, it would help me a lot.

Thanks for reading my story.

Edit 1: I replaced almost all the words 'begin' with "being" because Grammarly doesn't check if the word makes sense with the sentence.
Comment: This was the first issue of writing in English because sometimes my lack of vocabulary could not let me write what I wanted but if I write in Spanish and then translate in English I can write my ideas and those could be understood and after translate from English to Spanish I could see what sentences didn't make sense.

Edit 2: I added spaces where the name 'Twilight Sparkle' was written and replaced the word 'ballation' for "battalion" because that was my mistake for not check my pacing.
Comment: After I imported my story from Google Docs, some words were glued together, probably was because an issue of the importation or was my mistake, even if I can swear that I didn't write it like that, the proof was exposed and I can't fault to a program if I can't prove the contrary.

Edit 3: I removed some redundant words like "really" in some sentences but not in all of them, sometimes be redundant is necessary to get the point.
Comment: Maybe I'm narrow-minded on this point but there are people who cannot understand if you are not redundant.

Has anyone has used the text to speech function? I'm believing I'm on my last editing and I'm using that function to see if the phonetics are appealing but I'm finding myself on a weird issue on this part.

The creature that spoke was something that he hasn’t seen before on all his life, it towers him over 6 foot, standing on his back hooves/pawns/talons/whatever was it, it lacked fur, feathers or even chitin except a bush of hairs on the top of his head there below there are diminutive eyes, what looked like a snout combined with a beak but fleshy and what could be his lips but with skin that didn’t look the same as its face, if he was to guess, he would say that that part suffered a first-degree burn and was just started to heal.

Could be just a glitch?

I checked on both PC and phone versions, and I think it's my browser of the PC, but if you notice something unusual tell me.

I'm not crazy, I'M NOT CRAZY!
Comment: If you can hear a person talking and you can understand, then you feel satisfied.

Edit 5:

What happened at the Ponyville clinic was as bad as Adrian explained?

Comment: That was just embarrassing, I didn't even see it until three days ago.

Now I could start fresh and write another thing or I could try to focus on a sequel of Thorax talking with Princess Celestia and we see Adam's plan in action.

So what do you think?