About 'The Edge'

I'm looking for a bit of constructive feedback on one of my stories, The Edge. The tone was a lot darker and the story was generally more descriptive than I usually write.

I also wrote the first half on paper, so I had to type it out before I continued writing. I think that may have improved the quality of writing, did anyone notice that? Should I do it more often?

Should I try to write more stories with this tone or level of description?

Thank you to anyone who gives feedback.