Director's cut: When Dating Advice Doesn't Work..." Chapter three: Rarity's and Pinkie Pie's Advice

First off, Pinkie Pie was originally in chapter two, and Eric went to her after Applejack's advice failed. However, because of how Eric reacted to Pinkie wanting to help I thought it would be much more fitting for it to happen after the rest of the Mane 6 tried to help him, so I moved her to chapter three.

What I thought of having Pinkie do was different too: she was going to suggest giving a gift but have it backfire, similar to how it did with Rarity's gift. But, I had trouble thinking of what Rarity might suggest at the point she appeared in the story (that could backfire) so I changed what Pinkie did to help, and instead had her throw a party to help Eric ask out Eric.

On another note, originally, Pinkie didn't say question Eric "going" to Twilight for help, and Eric, near the end of the chapter, said in his narration about how he was at least glad Pinkie didn't say anything about his spending too much together. But Pinkie, in a "narration" of her own would in a 4th wall break say Oh yeah, I forgot! Yes, I think you have spent too much time together, Eric And Eric would tell her to "get out of the narration!"

She would go, but not after asking Eric why won't he ask out Twilight, and he'll yell again to get out of the narration, then after Pinkie "leaves" he'll feel bad, and mention to later get Pinkie a pink balloon and apologize to her. But I instead cut the 4th wall part, and instead had Pinkie do it in dialogue. But I also didn't her say anything about Eric "spending too much time with Twilight".

The Rarity part didn't really go through any noticeable changes during editing, so not much to say about that.

There was one more little change, but it's a borderline spoiler for chapter four, so I will say what that change is in the Director's cut for chapter four.

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