KOTD Chapter 24 edited

*Cracks neck* sweet lord these long chapters are murder. I mean yes they're long, but I've read them so many damn times, especially this chapter. I had spent a long time trying to make the descriptions short, sweet, meaningful and poetic. I still saw some previous dialogue problems, back when I'd say the body language of who's talking, then put in a comma, followed by the dialogue. Granted this was one of the first scenes I wrote before I had actually began the story. Before chapter 1 was even written, I had tons of prewritten scenes lined up. I can't tell you how excited I was for letting this one out of its box.