The NLAC has to deal with what lyrics · 1:55am Jan 2nd, 2017
I have been debating this over and over again and I think I want to have some kind of duet with Diamond and Adagio during the course of the story. Potentially I'd be using some of the lyrics from Light of your Cutie Mark for some of Diamond's vocals, but I'm no expert at creating lyrics and I'm unsure if I should follow the Light of your Cutie Mark melody/beat.
Thought I'd create this blog for the readers to get an opinion and perhaps a bit of help. So primarily I'm asking the following questions to the readers and fans of NLAC content.
1) Would a duet be something you'd like to see?
2) Anybody interested in helping me figure out the tempo and the lyrics for this thing?
I think that about covers it. I can always add more later if I think of something I forgot.
Um, now that that's done, I leave you to enjoy the latest update if you haven't read it yet.
Well that's quite a tough one I must say but I think a debt is a good choice, as for the song part I think it should stay the same from start to half middle while the other half and ending be of your own twist
The song "Light of your Cutie Mark" already has some oddly placed emphasized syllables, which would make writing a parody a daunting task indeed. My personal favorite part of that song is the harmony that the Crusaders got to employ, which of course would be lost in text. Don't misunderstand; if you can make a rewrite of the lyrics work, then more power to you.
I'd be down to help out with lyrics. It sounds interesting, so shoot me a PM if you want any input!
Either way, good luck, and keep on rockin' the story.
I can help with the lyrics, no problems; I can make them flow naturally. I've been composing a lot of music and writing lyrics since high school. I even made some extensions. So PM me if you wish. I can show you my stuff even.
Good luck. I hope it works out. The story is definitely picking up speed. Keep it going!
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Ok so, yeah, wasn't sure on how to approach this, but I figured I'd just put it up here. This would probably make it easier.
This is the unedited and raw scene with the lyrics I've strung together, I can already tell some of the pacing is a bit off and maybe it won't work the best, since Light of your Cutie Mark is a slightly shorter song, but anyway I present the first draft of Light on this Hidden Lark, as sung by Diamond Tiara and Adagio Dazzle, feel free to offer suggestions and things that could help out, whatever you might think needs it.
Diamond rolled her eyes and spun away from Adagio, without warning a melody seemed to pick up as she started to dig through her closet. “Adagio Dazzle, stay out of my way. This plan will expose the truth, and it should only be from me!”
Adagio took a step back in surprise and shot the younger girl a glare. “Now, Diamond Tiara, this is not the way. If you listen to me we can ensure victory.”
Diamond smirked and pirouetted out of the closet as she tossed her yellow jacket on the bed. “You don’t even know me at all, wouldn’t understand the meaning of my fall. What my family would think if I ever fail at anything! I’m a Diamond that means you never break, no matter what it has to eventually take. Whatever I will win in the end!”
Adagio slid forward almost like a cresting wave and grasped Diamond’s arm forcing her to look at her. “Foolish human girl, to hold power is not enough! You need to have all of the right stuff. If you followed my lead we could stop them in their tracks, their traaaacks! Trust in me, and I will guarantee, that if you just play the right part, you’ll shed the light, shed the light on this hidden lark.”
Diamond leapt aside and shot Adagio a glare.
Adagio grinned briefly and swayed closer.
“Trust in you, you have not earned. Have you failed to learn all you can learn? I refuse to be second fiddle to anyone. This is my plan and I don’t plan on sharing. And you won’t succeed in making me caring, so why don’t you just go away, awayyyyyyy!”
Adagio smirked now as she managed to grab Diamond Tiara and pull her close. “Silly filly you know so little at all, don’t even understand that if you ignore me you will surely fall. If you’re willing to win in the end than you need to try and bend, just a little more I would say, trust in me and we’ll surely win the day.”
Diamond tried to pull away, but Adagio’s grip tightened and her eyes shone briefly with a green light as her amulet shone brighter. “I don’t care what you say, I know the best way to win this day! I will expose them all I can be sure, whatever you think you have it will not allure. I will force this club from the dark and shed the light, shed the light on this hidden lark.”
Adagio grit her teeth briefly, but kept in time with the mysterious tempo from the nether and gently began to caress Diamond’s face. “Why is it so hard for you to see? You don’t need to engage in all this hostility.”
Diamond trembled slightly. “I’ve told you already my goal, don’t think you’re talking to some foal. I’m not some stupid pony at all. I want to ensure victory and I’m going to make my claims right now that if you stand in my way I vow, you will rue the day you tried anything!”
“But don’t you see, if we work as one we can be ultimately victorious. Listen to me, I know the secrets to achieve power and together we could be glorious. The things that make ponies and people fall in line, again and again every time. So what do you say will you agree to let me join the play? Can’t we put aside our differences if it means we can achieve everything?”
Diamond frowned in confusion as Adagio continued to stroke her hair and face lovingly. Then her eyes fell on the amulet and she seemed to wilt slightly. “Perhaps we could join forces.”
“Yes that’s the way!”
“And together we’d be stronger than ever.”
Adagio nodded. “Yes stronger than ever!”
Diamond slowly broke into a sinister smile. “And your voice has power again or so you’ve claimed.”
“Then you’ll trust in me, to help you with the mark?”
Diamond leaned in close to Adagio pressing her back into her after spinning around and stared at her in the mirror.
Adagio glanced up sensing now was the perfect time to join together in harmony.
“And together we can shed the light, shed the light on this hidden lark!”
The music slowly faded away and Adagio broke into a wide sultry grin. Gently she reached down and stroked her hand through Diamond’s hair.
Slowly a matching grin spread across Diamond’s face. “I think this could be the beginning of a beautiful partnership,” she declared.
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Alright, adjusting this song now. I'll msg you privately for questions.