Beginning a new round of edits. · 2:21pm Apr 29th, 2016
I've been putting it off for far too long, so at last, I've begun a series of edits on the early chapters to remove and repair the insane misuse of 'would' and 'own' before I had editors to make me behave properly. I am also fixing the formatting to kake it universal throughout the series.
Improved versions of the prologue, chapters 1- and Interludes 1 & 2, have already been uploaded, and Ive made great progress on Interlude 3.
Please note: These are not full rewrites, something else that I contiue to put off, but hopefully these changes will make the early chapters more palatable until I get the motivation to do full rewrites of the old chapters.
Thanks for reading and hope to have lore to show you all soon!
Update #1: Interlude 4 Parts 1-4 updated as well! Far less formatting required, more focused on grammar and overuse of 'would' and 'own'.
Hold on, you're going to rewrite the prologue, chapter 1, and the first three interludes? Why?
That's a good Psi-Nova. Here's Pinkie Pie pretending to be Sans as a reward.
3905287 Seen that before, it's smart and funny!
3905152 Because of changes to my writing style and little mistakes I've made that really bug me. The actual story won't change at all, just little tweaks here and there that need to happen for consistency and to fix grammatical errors I made.
For example, I used to write things like:
Where as these days I'd write that as something like:
Not a dramatic difference, but a lot of my old writing from 2 years ago when I started this story bugs me.
3905602 So, it's just some editing. I thought that by ful rewrite you meant adding a few scenes to the parts (honestly, when I read rewrite I thought there was going to be a longer RedheartXLuna interaction). Still, thanks for the effort you put into the story.
3905623 I understand, haha. While I'd like to expand upon the content of my earlier chapters, I don't think I ever missed anything dramatically important, so I don't think I will. The only example I can think of off the top of my head is a very minor one, specifically when Dash gets the Wonderbolts tick from Dusk and Rarity during her birthday interlude. That's an important exception though, and it will make more sense. [plus as an honest author: I forgot about it and it's only because one of my editors pointed it out that the ticket is going to come up again soon!]
Redheart and Luna? I'm going to grandfather that scene. I've fought with too many of my editors over it to remove it, but I might make a few minor edits to it just to show how desperate Luna is for physical affection after 1,000 years of isolation.
Thank you for always being one of the first to read and comment! It's great having people around to support my insanity!
3905637 You're welcome. Maybe the edited Interlude 2 would solve the mystery of how Redheart managed got Luna's panties, lol.
3905639 No. But maybe Nightmare Night will.