A question nopony cares about: Where's Nightsong's Awakening?

For future reference, note that it was a terribly written mess, and I only posted it in the first place because I was an enthused optimist. After recieving some feedback, and posting another story (which is... better) I've taken it down because nopony liked it other than me and my family (but they don't count).
I hope that, while some people will have problems and complaints about my work, somepony will find something, anything good inside of these words I've spent countless afternoons and free periods pouring my soul into.
I'm not going to ask for likes (although, if you really like the story, I would appreciate the boost), but that those who dislike my work tell me what the problem is. If you don't have a reason worth explaining for it, don't muddle my work with a rather useless red stain. I'm looking for constructive critique, not complaints.
If your reasoning is valid, and you dislike the story, I will try what I can to amend it. This story is something akin to a pet, which I will try to heal when damaged. When I fix the problem, I will ask that you give me another chance, see if the story is worth other peoples' time. If you like the fix I've given it, please remove the dislike.